Y5A I Go Quiet Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Handwriting

Handwriting

palm crouch

thumb push

finger tap

finger lift

R E A D Y

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chap

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My Turn

Your Turn

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

hurtled

Who/What

Sentence

I hurtled.

Add Detail: fronted adverbials

For 253 days,

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I hurtled through space.

Re-read

Build

For 253 days,

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Check

I hurtled through space.

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My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

completed

Subject

Sentence

I completed my scan.

Add Detail: semi-colon for independent clauses

I completed my scan; the data was sent back to Earth.

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Re-read

Build

Insert the semi-colon to link the two independent clauses that could stand alone.

Check

I completed my scan; the data was sent back to Earth.

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My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Title

Paragraph

Effective verbs

Past tense

Metaphors

Text structure

Features

Greta Saves the Woods

Greta, who lived deep in the ancient, whispering woods, adored her home. The towering trees, which had stood for centuries, sheltered countless animals whose homes were nestled among their gnarled, protective branches. Life bloomed within the sunlight which dappled gently through the infinite layers of emerald leaves. Colourful wildflowers danced in the breeze as birds soared above (their vivid wings unfurled against the azure sky). A symphony of colour and song enveloped the woods. But recently, Greta had noticed signs of change. Patches of trees had vanished and streams (once so clear) were clouded with dirt.

Past tense

Title

Metaphors

Effective verbs

Paragraph

Click on Click off

Writer's Knowledge

Words and phrases for atmosphere

Commas for clarity

Personification

Speech punctuation

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Brackets for extra information

Let me show you

Drag the words inside the brackets to add the extra information to the sentence.

(though quiet at first)

Greta's voice ____________________ grew stronger with every word she spoke.

Brackets for extra information

Let's find and discuss

Driven by curiosity and concern, Greta decided to investigate the damage that seemed to worsen every day. Following the growing sound of menacing engines which thundered and echoed through the woods, she caught sight of a group of Builders. Greta watched as the Builders continued to clear the land to make roads, oblivious to the animals that fled in fear. Smoke billowed into the sky, suffocating all life, and the ground trembled with each mighty tree that crashed down. Greta’s heart ached as she realised the Builders were destroying the woods that she (and so many others) called home.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Brackets for extra information

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Words and phrases for atmosphere

Commas for clarity

Personification

Speech punctuation

Fronted adverbials

Let me show you

Let's place a comma after each fronted adverbial.

That evening the boy crept into the enchanting forest.

In the dark tunnels twisted roots curled along the walls.

With a brave heart she stepped into the underground world.

Reveal

Fronted adverbials

Let's find and discuss

Full of rage and desperation, Greta marched straight up to the Builders. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried. The Builders paused, their deafening equipment rumbling into silence. “What do you mean?” one questioned, scratching his head. Greta, determined to captivate their attention, explained how the trees (which provided them with clean air) were disappearing and how the animals, who relied on the forest, were running out of places to hide.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Fronted adverbials

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Words and phrases for atmosphere

Commas for clarity

Personification

Speech punctuation

Personification

Reveal

Let me show you

Drag the best words and phrases for reflecting the atmosphere as the environment changes.

the woods

the woods

the woods

the woods

the woods

the woods

Personification

Let's find and discuss

Driven by curiosity and concern, Greta decided to investigate the damage that seemed to worsen every day. Following the growing sound of menacing engines which thundered and echoed through the woods, she caught sight of a group of Builders. Greta watched as the Builders continued to clear the land to make roads, oblivious to the animals that fled in fear. Smoke billowed into the sky, suffocating all life, and the ground trembled with each mighty tree that crashed down. Greta’s heart ached as she realised the Builders were destroying the woods that she (and so many others) called home.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Personification

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Words and phrases for atmosphere

Commas for clarity

Personification

Speech punctuation

Personification

Let me show you

Match each phrase to its meaning.

Ivy grew along the walls.

windows stared with tired eyes

Smoke rose from the chimneys.

chimneys coughed out smoky sighs

The windows looked old and gloomy.

shoots of ivy raced along the bricks

Reveal

Personification

Let's find and discuss

True to their word, the Builders immediately joined Greta in saving the precious, endangered woods where peace and beauty belonged. Together, they planted new trees (which soon blossomed) and purified the streams that would soon sparkle again. As the weeks went on, Greta smiled proudly as the familiar symphony of colour and song filled the air once more.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Words and phrases for atmosphere

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Which One's Right?

Which one shows speech punctuation used correctly?

A. “Stop!” You’re ravaging our woods, she cried.

B. Stop! You’re ravaging our woods, “she cried”.

C. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods”, she cried.

D. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried.

Yes or No?

Do these need question marks?

A Can you imagine that

Yes

No

B The queen did not like it

No

Yes

C What she did was unfair

No

Yes

D Did she like noise

Yes

No

Tick Me

How do you know the queen didn't like silence? Tick two.

A she behaved like a queen

B she hated quietness

C she was powerful

Check

D she managed to ban silence

Picture Me

Which image best shows this phrase, reflecting the change of atmosphere? ‘purified the streams that would soon sparkle again’

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

the woods

the woods

the woods

The Builders, who finally understood, were overwhelmed by guilt, their consciences weighing heavily on them. Their faces darkened as the disastrous reality of the possible consequences became painfully clear. “We never meant to harm or intimidate,” they admitted, recognising the damage they had caused. Greta (whose heart swelled with hope and anticipation) nodded. “It might not be too late. If we work together, we can strengthen the woods again.” The Builders promised Greta they would change their ways. They now knew that they must prioritise protecting these woods.

Greta, who lived deep in the ancient, whispering woods, adored her home. The towering trees, which had stood for centuries, sheltered countless animals whose homes were nestled among their gnarled, protective branches. Life bloomed within the sunlight which dappled gently through the infinite layers of emerald leaves. Colourful wildflowers danced in the breeze as birds soared above (their vivid wings unfurled against the azure sky). A symphony of colour and song enveloped the woods. But recently, Greta had noticed signs of change. Patches of trees had vanished and streams (once so clear) were clouded with dirt.

Full of rage and desperation, Greta marched straight up to the Builders. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried. The Builders paused, their deafening equipment rumbling into silence. “What do you mean?” one questioned, scratching his head. Greta, determined to captivate their attention, explained how the trees (which provided them with clean air) were disappearing and how the animals, who relied on the forest, were running out of places to hide.

The Builders, who finally understood, were overwhelmed by guilt, their consciences weighing heavily on them. Their faces darkened as the disastrous reality of the possible consequences became painfully clear. “We never meant to harm or intimidate,” they admitted, recognising the damage they had caused. Greta (whose heart swelled with hope and anticipation) nodded. “It might not be too late. If we work together, we can strengthen the woods again.” The Builders promised Greta they would change their ways. They now knew that they must prioritise protecting these woods.

Thumb to first finger, press down hard 1, 2, 3, 4. Move to the next, let's do some more 1, 2, 3, 4.

Thumb to first finger, press down hard 1, 2, 3, 4. Move to the next, let's do some more 1, 2, 3, 4.

D she managed to ban silence

Curve around, up to the top, down the same line, up and over with a flick at the end.

Full of rage and desperation, Greta marched straight up to the Builders. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried. The Builders paused, their deafening equipment rumbling into silence. “What do you mean?” one questioned, scratching his head. Greta, determined to captivate their attention, explained how the trees (which provided them with clean air) were disappearing and how the animals, who relied on the forest, were running out of places to hide.

That evening the boy crept into the enchanting forest.

In the dark tunnels twisted roots curled along the walls.

With a brave heart she stepped into the underground world.

The Builders, who finally understood, were overwhelmed by guilt, their consciences weighing heavily on them. Their faces darkened as the disastrous reality of the possible consequences became painfully clear. “We never meant to harm or intimidate,” they admitted, recognising the damage they had caused. Greta (whose heart swelled with hope and anticipation) nodded. “It might not be too late. If we work together, we can strengthen the woods again.” The Builders promised Greta they would change their ways. They now knew that they must prioritise protecting these woods.

For 253 days,

___________________

I hurtled through space.

Full of rage and desperation, Greta marched straight up to the Builders. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried. The Builders paused, their deafening equipment rumbling into silence. “What do you mean?” one questioned, scratching his head. Greta, determined to captivate their attention, explained how the trees (which provided them with clean air) were disappearing and how the animals, who relied on the forest, were running out of places to hide.

Full of rage and desperation, Greta marched straight up to the Builders. “Stop! You’re ravaging our woods,” she cried. The Builders paused, their deafening equipment rumbling into silence. “What do you mean?” one questioned, scratching his head. Greta, determined to captivate their attention, explained how the trees (which provided them with clean air) were disappearing and how the animals, who relied on the forest, were running out of places to hide.

Greta, who lived deep in the ancient, whispering woods, adored her home. The towering trees, which had stood for centuries, sheltered countless animals whose homes were nestled among their gnarled, protective branches. Life bloomed within the sunlight which dappled gently through the infinite layers of emerald leaves. Colourful wildflowers danced in the breeze as birds soared above (their vivid wings unfurled against the azure sky). A symphony of colour and song enveloped the woods. But recently, Greta had noticed signs of change. Patches of trees had vanished and streams (once so clear) were clouded with dirt.

Frog Jump-Squat down low, hands on the floor. Jump forward and land softly. Elephant Walk-Bend forward, arms hang. Walk and swing arms side to side. Caterpillar Crawl-Walk hands forward, then feet up to hands. Repeat. Turtle Push-Push hands into floor or wall. Hold, then relax. Crab Crouch-Lift hips in crab position. Walk forwards or backwards. Monkey Grab-Reach one arm across the body, then the other. Alternate rhythmically. Seal Clap-Clap in front, above, and below while keeping rhythm. Crocodile Twist-Keep feet still. Twist upper body side to side slowly.

Greta, who lived deep in the ancient, whispering woods, adored her home. The towering trees, which had stood for centuries, sheltered countless animals whose homes were nestled among their gnarled, protective branches. Life bloomed within the sunlight which dappled gently through the infinite layers of emerald leaves. Colourful wildflowers danced in the breeze as birds soared above (their vivid wings unfurled against the azure sky). A symphony of colour and song enveloped the woods. But recently, Greta had noticed signs of change. Patches of trees had vanished and streams (once so clear) were clouded with dirt.

Thumb to first finger, press down hard 1, 2, 3, 4. Move to the next, let's do some more 1, 2, 3, 4.

Thumb to first finger, press down hard 1, 2, 3, 4. Move to the next, let's do some more 1, 2, 3, 4.

I completed my scan; the data was sent back to Earth.

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Greta, who lived deep in the ancient, whispering woods, adored her home. The towering trees, which had stood for centuries, sheltered countless animals whose homes were nestled among their gnarled, protective branches. Life bloomed within the sunlight which dappled gently through the infinite layers of emerald leaves. Colourful wildflowers danced in the breeze as birds soared above (their vivid wings unfurled against the azure sky). A symphony of colour and song enveloped the woods. But recently, Greta had noticed signs of change. Patches of trees had vanished and streams (once so clear) were clouded with dirt.

The Builders, who finally understood, were overwhelmed by guilt, their consciences weighing heavily on them. Their faces darkened as the disastrous reality of the possible consequences became painfully clear. “We never meant to harm or intimidate,” they admitted, recognising the damage they had caused. Greta (whose heart swelled with hope and anticipation) nodded. “It might not be too late. If we work together, we can strengthen the woods again.” The Builders promised Greta they would change their ways. They now knew that they must prioritise protecting these woods.

Thumb to first finger, press down hard 1, 2, 3, 4. Move to the next, let's do some more 1, 2, 3, 4.