Y5A Curiosity WO2 Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

misjudged

Who/What

Sentence

I misjudged the depth.

Add Detail: verb prefixes

misjudged

______________

the depth of the crater.

Re-read

Build

the depth of the crater.

Check

misjudged

______________

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

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Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

investigate

Subject

scientists

Sentence

Scientists investigate further.

Add Detail: subjunctive form

If water were discovered,

_________________________

scientists could investigate further.

Re-read

Build

scientists could investigate further.

If water were discovered,

_________________________

Check

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Title

Paragraph

Key information

Factual details

Passive voice

Text structure

Features

Mission Log: The Surface of the Moon

Report by: Neil Armstrong Mission: Apollo 11 Date: 20.07.1969 Landing and arrival At 20:17, I landed the lunar module successfully on the moon’s surface. The onboard computer performed effectively (despite alarms being raised due to systems destabilising). Shortly afterwards, communication with Mission Control was regained. All systems were then rechecked (with no faults detected) and confirmed to be working as expected. After this, I prepared to disembark from the spacecraft. This mission, which had long been awaited, could now proceed with confidence.

Key information

Factual details

Title

Paragraph

Passive voice

Click on Click off

Writer's Knowledge

Subheadings

Formal words and phrases

Technical vocabulary

Adverbials

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Adverbials

Reveal

Let me show you

Drag the adverbials into the passage to help it flow.

nearby

occasionally

regularly

Soon afterwards

I transmitted data and checked my systems _________. _______________, I collected samples and began analysing the soil. My wheels ___________ slipped on the rough terrain as I captured images of the nearby craters. I recorded the unusual rock patterns ________ and scanned the remaining area.

Adverbials

Let's find and discuss

Landing and arrival At 20:17, I landed the lunar module successfully on the moon’s surface. The onboard computer performed effectively (despite alarms being raised due to systems destabilising). Shortly afterwards, communication with Mission Control was regained. All systems were then rechecked (with no faults detected) and confirmed to be working as expected. After this, I prepared to disembark from the spacecraft. This mission, which had long been awaited, could now proceed with confidence.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Adverbials

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Subheadings

Formal words and phrases

Technical vocabulary

Adverbials

Let me show you

Formal words and phrases

Join the formal and the informal equivalents.

transmitting data

finding stuff out

conducting an investigation

science gear

tech problems

scientific apparatus

sending messages

system malfunctions

Reveal

Formal words and phrases

Let's find and discuss

Landing and arrival At 20:17, I landed the lunar module successfully on the moon’s surface. The onboard computer performed effectively (despite alarms being raised due to systems destabilising). Shortly afterwards, communication with Mission Control was regained. All systems were then rechecked (with no faults detected) and confirmed to be working as expected. After this, I prepared to disembark from the spacecraft. This mission, which had long been awaited, could now proceed with confidence.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Formal words and phrases

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Subheadings

Formal words and phrases

Technical vocabulary

Adverbials

Let me show you

Technical vocabulary

Match the technical vocabulary to the correct definition.

a self-contained, detachable part of a spacecraft with a specific job

hazardous

module

very tiny pieces of something, such as grains of sand

something that involves significant risk or danger

particles

Reveal

Technical vocabulary

Let's find and discuss

Landing and arrival At 20:17, I landed the lunar module successfully on the moon’s surface. The onboard computer performed effectively (despite alarms being raised due to systems destabilising). Shortly afterwards, communication with Mission Control was regained. All systems were then rechecked (with no faults detected) and confirmed to be working as expected. After this, I prepared to disembark from the spacecraft. This mission, which had long been awaited, could now proceed with confidence.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Technical vocabulary

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Subheadings

Formal words and phrases

Technical vocabulary

Adverbials

Subheadings

Let me show you

Join the subheading to the most accurate definition.

Landing and arrival

A section about the arrival at the intended destination

A section about the effectiveness of the equipment

Tasks and sample collection

A section about the assignments completed

Equipment performance

Reveal

Subheadings

Let's find and discuss

Preparation for future tasks After completing the initial tasks, the samples I collected were secured inside the module. Further tests of the samples will be carried out once I have returned to Earth. Equipment was rechecked and the spacecraft, which must operate efficiently, was prepared. Fuel levels shall be monitored closely (especially as fuel alarms had been raised after the launch) during my return. The last stage of this historic mission is ready to begin.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Subheadings

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Tick Me

Which words can be used as adverbials? Tick two.

A then

B should

C now

Check

D several

Odd One Out

Which one of these is not a formal phrase?

B prepared to disembark

A performed effectively

D did a good job

C proved highly suitable

Picture Me

Which image best shows the technical vocabulary phrase ‘Sea of Tranquillity’?

True or False?

Subheadings are used in report writing to organise information and show what each part is about.

False

True

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

Tasks and sample collection Firstly, I began to collect samples of the surface dust. The soil, which was soft and powdery, was carefully gathered using special tools. Several intriguing rock samples (some I did not recognise at all) were also collected. Equipment was then deployed to record data (including cameras and scientific instruments). The photographs taken will provide valuable evidence for future exploration.

Equipment performance The spacesuit, that had been designed for extreme conditions, performed reliably throughout. Temperature levels remained controlled and oxygen supply was kept steady. However, the gloves were stiff and restrictive, which made it difficult to move my fingers while collecting rocks. These gloves should be redesigned to ensure that tasks for future missions can be undertaken more easily.

If water were discovered,

_________________________

scientists could investigate further.

Tasks and sample collection Firstly, I began to collect samples of the surface dust. The soil, which was soft and powdery, was carefully gathered using special tools. Several intriguing rock samples (some I did not recognise at all) were also collected. Equipment was then deployed to record data (including cameras and scientific instruments). The photographs taken will provide valuable evidence for future exploration.

Landing site overview The landing site (located in the Sea of Tranquillity) proved highly suitable for my exploration to begin. The surface, where I had touched down, seemed to be covered in fine, grey dust. There were small craters and scattered rocks, but nothing blocking my way. This area, which had been carefully selected before launch, supported a safe landing. In addition, the ground remained firm under my feet. Movement felt unusual, as the moon’s weaker gravity allowed for lighter, slower steps that felt more like a bounce across its surface.

Equipment performance The spacesuit, that had been designed for extreme conditions, performed reliably throughout. Temperature levels remained controlled and oxygen supply was kept steady. However, the gloves were stiff and restrictive, which made it difficult to move my fingers while collecting rocks. These gloves should be redesigned to ensure that tasks for future missions can be undertaken more easily.

Equipment performance The spacesuit, that had been designed for extreme conditions, performed reliably throughout. Temperature levels remained controlled and oxygen supply was kept steady. However, the gloves were stiff and restrictive, which made it difficult to move my fingers while collecting rocks. These gloves should be redesigned to ensure that tasks for future missions can be undertaken more easily.

Landing site overview The landing site (located in the Sea of Tranquillity) proved highly suitable for my exploration to begin. The surface, where I had touched down, seemed to be covered in fine, grey dust. There were small craters and scattered rocks, but nothing blocking my way. This area, which had been carefully selected before launch, supported a safe landing. In addition, the ground remained firm under my feet. Movement felt unusual, as the moon’s weaker gravity allowed for lighter, slower steps that felt more like a bounce across its surface.

misjudged

______________

the depth of the crater.

Equipment performance The spacesuit, that had been designed for extreme conditions, performed reliably throughout. Temperature levels remained controlled and oxygen supply was kept steady. However, the gloves were stiff and restrictive, which made it difficult to move my fingers while collecting rocks. These gloves should be redesigned to ensure that tasks for future missions can be undertaken more easily.

Tasks and sample collection Firstly, I began to collect samples of the surface dust. The soil, which was soft and powdery, was carefully gathered using special tools. Several intriguing rock samples (some I did not recognise at all) were also collected. Equipment was then deployed to record data (including cameras and scientific instruments). The photographs taken will provide valuable evidence for future exploration.

Preparation for future tasks After completing the initial tasks, the samples I collected were secured inside the module. Further tests of the samples will be carried out once I have returned to Earth. Equipment was rechecked and the spacecraft, which must operate efficiently, was prepared. Fuel levels shall be monitored closely (especially as fuel alarms had been raised after the launch) during my return. The last stage of this historic mission is ready to begin.

Report by: Neil Armstrong Mission: Apollo 11 Date: 20.07.1969 Landing and arrival At 20:17, I landed the lunar module successfully on the moon’s surface. The onboard computer performed effectively (despite alarms being raised due to systems destabilising). Shortly afterwards, communication with Mission Control was regained. All systems were then rechecked (with no faults detected) and confirmed to be working as expected. After this, I prepared to disembark from the spacecraft. This mission, which had long been awaited, could now proceed with confidence.

Tasks and sample collection Firstly, I began to collect samples of the surface dust. The soil, which was soft and powdery, was carefully gathered using special tools. Several intriguing rock samples (some I did not recognise at all) were also collected. Equipment was then deployed to record data (including cameras and scientific instruments). The photographs taken will provide valuable evidence for future exploration.

Landing site overview The landing site (located in the Sea of Tranquillity) proved highly suitable for my exploration to begin. The surface, where I had touched down, seemed to be covered in fine, grey dust. There were small craters and scattered rocks, but nothing blocking my way. This area, which had been carefully selected before launch, supported a safe landing. In addition, the ground remained firm under my feet. Movement felt unusual, as the moon’s weaker gravity allowed for lighter, slower steps that felt more like a bounce across its surface.

Landing site overview The landing site (located in the Sea of Tranquillity) proved highly suitable for my exploration to begin. The surface, where I had touched down, seemed to be covered in fine, grey dust. There were small craters and scattered rocks, but nothing blocking my way. This area, which had been carefully selected before launch, supported a safe landing. In addition, the ground remained firm under my feet. Movement felt unusual, as the moon’s weaker gravity allowed for lighter, slower steps that felt more like a bounce across its surface.

Preparation for future tasks After completing the initial tasks, the samples I collected were secured inside the module. Further tests of the samples will be carried out once I have returned to Earth. Equipment was rechecked and the spacecraft, which must operate efficiently, was prepared. Fuel levels shall be monitored closely (especially as fuel alarms had been raised after the launch) during my return. The last stage of this historic mission is ready to begin.

regularly

Soon afterwards

occasionally

nearby

Preparation for future tasks After completing the initial tasks, the samples I collected were secured inside the module. Further tests of the samples will be carried out once I have returned to Earth. Equipment was rechecked and the spacecraft, which must operate efficiently, was prepared. Fuel levels shall be monitored closely (especially as fuel alarms had been raised after the launch) during my return. The last stage of this historic mission is ready to begin.