Y5A Curiosity WO1 Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

hurtled

Who/What

I hurtled.

Sentence

Add Detail: fronted adverbials

For 253 days,

I hurtled through space.

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Re-read

Build

I hurtled through space.

For 253 days,

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Check

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

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Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

would fail

Subject

the mission

Sentence

The mission would fail.

Add Detail: subjunctive form

If the landing were to go wrong,

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the mission would fail.

Re-read

Build

the mission would fail.

If the landing were to go wrong,

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Check

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My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Title

Paragraph

Effective verbs

Past tense

Synonyms and antonyms

Text structure

Features

Journey to the Moon

With a thunderous roar, my journey to the moon began. The powerful rocket began to shudder and surge, lifting me into the endless, inky sea of space. My body was thrust back into the narrow seat – pressure juddering through me – as the force increased. Within minutes, I was watching the swirling marble of Earth begin to shrink. “All systems are go,” came a calm, steady voice from Mission Control through the headset. At that moment, the lunar module detached and I realised there was no turning back. We were committed.

Past tense

Title

Effective verbs

Synonyms and antonyms

Paragraph

Click on Click off

Writer's Knowledge

Metaphors

Speech punctuation

Fronted adverbials

Short sentences

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Fronted adverbials

Let me show you

Let's place a comma after each fronted adverbial.

As Earth glowed in the distance I began to drill into rocky surface.

After preparing for landing I took in my surroundings.

With confirmation from Mission Control I touched down.

Reveal

Fronted adverbials

Let's find and discuss

As I began the descent, my heart became a thumping drum. Warning lights flashed. Fuel was dangerously low. I reported this – as steadily as I could – and for a while, there was nothing but muffled static. Would we make it? Might the module run out of fuel and crash? For a split second, everything hung in the balance. Finally, Mission Control responded, “You are go to land.” With the greatest care, I guided the fragile craft downwards. We must not fail.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Fronted adverbials

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Metaphors

Speech punctuation

Fronted adverbials

Short sentences

Speech punctuation

Let me show you

Let's add the missing speech punctuation.

I announced I have made contact

Am I prepared to land I asked myself

I sent a message to say We are safe on Mars

Reveal

Speech punctuation

Let's find and discuss

With a gentle jolt – so slight it barely seemed real – I touched down on the moon’s powdery surface. Silence followed. “Houston, the Eagle has landed,” I announced, exhaling a sigh of relief. Slowly and deliberately, I disembarked from the craft – one step at a time – moving towards the unknown. Just then, my boot pressed into the fine, grey dust of the pock-marked surface. Barely able to contain my excitement, I said, “That’s one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind.” History had been made.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Speech punctuation

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Metaphors

Speech punctuation

Fronted adverbials

Short sentences

Short sentences

Let me show you

Let's use short sentences to create panic or excitement. Choose the most impactful from each pair.

The timing was going to be very important.

Every second mattered.

or

Warning lights flashed.

The flickering warning lights indicated trouble.

or

We were running out of fuel which could cause a dangerous problem.

Fuel was dangerously low.

or

Short sentences

Let's find and discuss

As I began the descent, my heart became a thumping drum. Warning lights flashed. Fuel was dangerously low. I reported this – as steadily as I could – and for a while, there was nothing but muffled static. Would we make it? Might the module run out of fuel and crash? For a split second, everything hung in the balance. Finally, Mission Control responded, “You are go to land.” With the greatest care, I guided the fragile craft downwards. We must not fail.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Short sentences

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Metaphors

Speech punctuation

Fronted adverbials

Short sentences

Let me show you

Metaphors

Underline the metaphors in the sentences.

Space was an endless, inky sea.

The swirling marble of Earth.

A ball of nerves twisted in my stomach.

Reveal

Metaphors

Let's find and discuss

With a thunderous roar, my journey to the moon began. The powerful rocket began to shudder and surge, lifting me into the endless, inky sea of space. My body was thrust back into the narrow seat – pressure juddering through me – as the force increased. Within minutes, I was watching the swirling marble of Earth begin to shrink. “All systems are go,” came a calm, steady voice from Mission Control through the headset. At that moment, the lunar module detached and I realised there was no turning back. We were committed.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Metaphors

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Odd One Out

Which one is not a fronted adverbial to show manner?

B As I began the descent,

A With a thunderous roar,

C Within minutes,

D Barely able to contain my excitement,

Which One's Right?

Which one shows speech punctuation used correctly?

A. “Mission Control responded, You are go to land.”

B. Mission Control responded, “You are go to land.”

C. “Mission Control responded,” You are go to land.

D. Mission Control responded, “You are go to land”.

True or False?

Short sentences can be used to create tension and excitement in the story.

False

True

Picture Me

Which image best shows this metaphor to help the reader imagine? ‘the swirling marble of Earth’

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

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Feedback: Who did what well?

With a thunderous roar, my journey to the moon began. The powerful rocket began to shudder and surge, lifting me into the endless, inky sea of space. My body was thrust back into the narrow seat – pressure juddering through me – as the force increased. Within minutes, I was watching the swirling marble of Earth begin to shrink. “All systems are go,” came a calm, steady voice from Mission Control through the headset. At that moment, the lunar module detached and I realised there was no turning back. We were committed.

With a thunderous roar, my journey to the moon began. The powerful rocket began to shudder and surge, lifting me into the endless, inky sea of space. My body was thrust back into the narrow seat – pressure juddering through me – as the force increased. Within minutes, I was watching the swirling marble of Earth begin to shrink. “All systems are go,” came a calm, steady voice from Mission Control through the headset. At that moment, the lunar module detached and I realised there was no turning back. We were committed.

Across the strange, lifeless landscape of the moon, I began my work of collecting samples and setting up equipment for soil and moisture tests. The ground shifted beneath me – each of my steps sinking into the soft ash – while the distant, glowing orb of home hung above me. It looked so small, yet it held everything I knew. I began to record my findings, uncovering knowledge that could reshape our understanding of space forever. There was still much to do… yet this was only the beginning.

If the landing were to go wrong,

_________________________________

the mission would fail.

With a gentle jolt – so slight it barely seemed real – I touched down on the moon’s powdery surface. Silence followed. “Houston, the Eagle has landed,” I announced, exhaling a sigh of relief. Slowly and deliberately, I disembarked from the craft – one step at a time – moving towards the unknown. Just then, my boot pressed into the fine, grey dust of the pock-marked surface. Barely able to contain my excitement, I said, “That’s one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind.” History had been made.

As I began the descent, my heart became a thumping drum. Warning lights flashed. Fuel was dangerously low. I reported this – as steadily as I could – and for a while, there was nothing but muffled static. Would we make it? Might the module run out of fuel and crash? For a split second, everything hung in the balance. Finally, Mission Control responded, “You are go to land.” With the greatest care, I guided the fragile craft downwards. We must not fail.

Beyond Earth’s atmosphere, I drifted through the silent, weightless void of space. The onboard computer – constantly recalculating and realigning our path – had to be precise. I stared out at the pale, ghostly surface of the nearing moon as a ball of nerves twisted in my stomach. Would I really land safely? What if I misjudged the descent? I readjusted the controls – determined to remain focused – but I could not relax. Every second mattered.

For 253 days,

I hurtled through space.

___________________

Across the strange, lifeless landscape of the moon, I began my work of collecting samples and setting up equipment for soil and moisture tests. The ground shifted beneath me – each of my steps sinking into the soft ash – while the distant, glowing orb of home hung above me. It looked so small, yet it held everything I knew. I began to record my findings, uncovering knowledge that could reshape our understanding of space forever. There was still much to do… yet this was only the beginning.

With a thunderous roar, my journey to the moon began. The powerful rocket began to shudder and surge, lifting me into the endless, inky sea of space. My body was thrust back into the narrow seat – pressure juddering through me – as the force increased. Within minutes, I was watching the swirling marble of Earth begin to shrink. “All systems are go,” came a calm, steady voice from Mission Control through the headset. At that moment, the lunar module detached and I realised there was no turning back. We were committed.

With a gentle jolt – so slight it barely seemed real – I touched down on the moon’s powdery surface. Silence followed. “Houston, the Eagle has landed,” I announced, exhaling a sigh of relief. Slowly and deliberately, I disembarked from the craft – one step at a time – moving towards the unknown. Just then, my boot pressed into the fine, grey dust of the pock-marked surface. Barely able to contain my excitement, I said, “That’s one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind.” History had been made.

With a gentle jolt – so slight it barely seemed real – I touched down on the moon’s powdery surface. Silence followed. “Houston, the Eagle has landed,” I announced, exhaling a sigh of relief. Slowly and deliberately, I disembarked from the craft – one step at a time – moving towards the unknown. Just then, my boot pressed into the fine, grey dust of the pock-marked surface. Barely able to contain my excitement, I said, “That’s one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind.” History had been made.

Beyond Earth’s atmosphere, I drifted through the silent, weightless void of space. The onboard computer – constantly recalculating and realigning our path – had to be precise. I stared out at the pale, ghostly surface of the nearing moon as a ball of nerves twisted in my stomach. Would I really land safely? What if I misjudged the descent? I readjusted the controls – determined to remain focused – but I could not relax. Every second mattered.

As I began the descent, my heart became a thumping drum. Warning lights flashed. Fuel was dangerously low. I reported this – as steadily as I could – and for a while, there was nothing but muffled static. Would we make it? Might the module run out of fuel and crash? For a split second, everything hung in the balance. Finally, Mission Control responded, “You are go to land.” With the greatest care, I guided the fragile craft downwards. We must not fail.

Across the strange, lifeless landscape of the moon, I began my work of collecting samples and setting up equipment for soil and moisture tests. The ground shifted beneath me – each of my steps sinking into the soft ash – while the distant, glowing orb of home hung above me. It looked so small, yet it held everything I knew. I began to record my findings, uncovering knowledge that could reshape our understanding of space forever. There was still much to do… yet this was only the beginning.

Beyond Earth’s atmosphere, I drifted through the silent, weightless void of space. The onboard computer – constantly recalculating and realigning our path – had to be precise. I stared out at the pale, ghostly surface of the nearing moon as a ball of nerves twisted in my stomach. Would I really land safely? What if I misjudged the descent? I readjusted the controls – determined to remain focused – but I could not relax. Every second mattered.

Across the strange, lifeless landscape of the moon, I began my work of collecting samples and setting up equipment for soil and moisture tests. The ground shifted beneath me – each of my steps sinking into the soft ash – while the distant, glowing orb of home hung above me. It looked so small, yet it held everything I knew. I began to record my findings, uncovering knowledge that could reshape our understanding of space forever. There was still much to do… yet this was only the beginning.

Beyond Earth’s atmosphere, I drifted through the silent, weightless void of space. The onboard computer – constantly recalculating and realigning our path – had to be precise. I stared out at the pale, ghostly surface of the nearing moon as a ball of nerves twisted in my stomach. Would I really land safely? What if I misjudged the descent? I readjusted the controls – determined to remain focused – but I could not relax. Every second mattered.

As Earth glowed in the distance, I began to drill into rocky surface.

After preparing for landing, I took in my surroundings.

With confirmation from Mission Control, I touched down.

I announced, "I have made contact."

"Am I prepared to land?" I asked myself.

I sent a message to say, "We are safe on Mars!"

Space was an endless, inky sea.

The swirling marble of Earth.

A ball of nerves twisted in my stomach.