Y5F Wilma Rudolph Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

was

Who/What

Sentence

I was ready.

Add Detail: cohesive devices

now

______

my training was over.

I was ready

Re-read

Build

my training was over.

now

______

Check

I was ready

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

help

Subject

Sentence

I help children.

Add Detail: subjunctive form

If only I were

______________

able to help more children just like I was.

Re-read

Build

able to help more children just like I was.

If only I were

______________

Check

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Paragraph

Intended audience

First person

Different tenses

Words and phrases for gratitude

Text structure

Features

A Gratitude Speech by Alice Coachman

I would like to begin by thanking you for inviting me to the Tuskegee Institute today. I am Alice Coachman, an Olympic athlete who began her journey on the dusty roads of Alabama, and I feel deeply honoured to stand before you. Today, I wish to share how my dreams, which once seemed out of reach, became a reality because of your unwavering support. Without your belief in me, my ambition might have remained only a dream.

Intended audience

Paragraph

Different tenses

First person

Words and phrases for gratitude

Click on Click off

Writer's Knowledge

Questions

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Words and phrases for feelings

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Let me show you

Modal verbs

Let's order the modal verbs from most to least likely to happen.

could

may

will

must

should

Most likely

Least likely

I __________ win gold for my country.

Modal verbs

Let's find and discuss

In November 1923, I was born in Albany, Georgia, at a time when girls were discouraged from competing in sport. Despite these expectations, I was a determined young athlete with a passion for running and jumping that could not be ignored. Why should I sit aside and watch? Fortunately, my aunt, who recognised my potential, encouraged me to continue training when others misunderstood my ambition. By the age of 12, I was the unrivalled athlete in Albany, regularly winning high school competitions. My dream, when it had once seemed impossible, was born.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Modal verbs

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Questions

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Words and phrases for feelings

Adverbials

Let me show you

Drag the adverbials into the passage to help it flow.

Unfortunately

always

Eventually

rarely

_____________ I realised that achieving my goals was not going to be easy. Being an athlete was _____________ easy for girls like me. ______________ I found my own ways to train and become a sprinter, but it was not _____________ easy.

Reveal

Adverbials

Let's find and discuss

As time pressed on, segregation arrived, creating barriers that disallowed me from using training facilities or even competing alongside white athletes. How was I supposed to achieve like them? I trained barefoot on dusty roads, carrying the hopes of a young girl with determination in her heart. It was then that you, the Tuskegee Institute, became part of my story. You invited me to study and train, providing an opportunity that realigned my future. With your guidance, my confidence strengthened. My dream, in spite of the adversity I faced, grew.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Adverbials

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Questions

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Words and phrases for feelings

Words and phrases for feelings

Let me show you

Surround the gold medal with phrases that best describe the Olympian's feelings.

as time went on

passion for running

I am Alice Coachman

with determination in her heart

my confidence strengthened

Reveal

Words and phrases for feelings

Let's find and discuss

At the 1948 London Olympics, I stood, ready at the long jump start line, filled with nervous excitement, thinking only of the support I had received from the Tuskegee Institute. I ran, I jumped, I landed… and I won! I had earned an Olympic gold medal, becoming the first black woman to achieve this honour. This victory, which changed my life forever, belonged not only to me, but to everyone who believed in my potential. For all who are in pursuit of their dreams – I sincerely believe that determination, along with the help of others, will pull you through. My dream, after everything I went through, had finally come true.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Words and phrases for feelings

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Questions

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Words and phrases for feelings

Questions

Let me show you

Let's discuss how these questions reveal the Olympian's thoughts.

Why should I sit aside and watch?

How was I supposed to achieve like them?

Questions

Let's find and discuss

In November 1923, I was born in Albany, Georgia, at a time when girls were discouraged from competing in sport. Despite these expectations, I was a determined young athlete with a passion for running and jumping that could not be ignored. Why should I sit aside and watch? Fortunately, my aunt, who recognised my potential, encouraged me to continue training when others misunderstood my ambition. By the age of 12, I was the unrivalled athlete in Albany, regularly winning high school competitions. My dream, when it had once seemed impossible, was born.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Questions

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Yes or No?Do these contain modal verbs?

No

A Determination will pull you through.

Yes

No

B How was I supposed to achieve?

Yes

C I knew I could win the race.

No

Yes

D I had earned an Olympic gold medal.

No

Yes

True or False?

Using a range of adverbials helps the writing to flow.

False

True

Picture Me

Which image best shows this phrase that describes the Olympian’s feelings? ‘filled with nervous excitement’

Which One's Right?

Which one shows why the Olympian might include the question “Should I give up now?” in her speech?

A. to explain how races work

B. to ask the audience for advice

C. to describe the setting

D. to show she was thinking about quitting

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

If only I were

______________

able to help more children just like I was.

I was ready

now

______

my training was over.

I would like to begin by thanking you for inviting me to the Tuskegee Institute today. I am Alice Coachman, an Olympic athlete who began her journey on the dusty roads of Alabama, and I feel deeply honoured to stand before you. Today, I wish to share how my dreams, which once seemed out of reach, became a reality because of your unwavering support. Without your belief in me, my ambition might have remained only a dream.

In the years that followed, I won national titles for running and the high jump, and the Olympic Games no longer felt unreachable, yet doubt still remained. Could I, a girl who had trained on rough, dusty streets, truly compete on the world stage? Unfortunately, the games were cancelled due to the Second World War and I began to reconsider my chance of ever achieving my dreams. Then, in 1948, I eventually qualified to represent America in the Olympics! I thought, could I do it? Would I be able to overlook the doubts I once had? Yet my dream, undeterred by my fear, was what carried me through.

At the 1948 London Olympics, I stood, ready at the long jump start line, filled with nervous excitement, thinking only of the support I had received from the Tuskegee Institute. I ran, I jumped, I landed… and I won! I had earned an Olympic gold medal, becoming the first black woman to achieve this honour. This victory, which changed my life forever, belonged not only to me, but to everyone who believed in my potential. For all who are in pursuit of their dreams – I sincerely believe that determination, along with the help of others, will pull you through. My dream, after everything I went through, had finally come true.

As time pressed on, segregation arrived, creating barriers that disallowed me from using training facilities or even competing alongside white athletes. How was I supposed to achieve like them? I trained barefoot on dusty roads, carrying the hopes of a young girl with determination in her heart. It was then that you, the Tuskegee Institute, became part of my story. You invited me to study and train, providing an opportunity that realigned my future. With your guidance, my confidence strengthened. My dream, in spite of the adversity I faced, grew.

Unfortunately

rarely

Eventually

always

At the 1948 London Olympics, I stood, ready at the long jump start line, filled with nervous excitement, thinking only of the support I had received from the Tuskegee Institute. I ran, I jumped, I landed… and I won! I had earned an Olympic gold medal, becoming the first black woman to achieve this honour. This victory, which changed my life forever, belonged not only to me, but to everyone who believed in my potential. For all who are in pursuit of their dreams – I sincerely believe that determination, along with the help of others, will pull you through. My dream, after everything I went through, had finally come true.

In the years that followed, I won national titles for running and the high jump, and the Olympic Games no longer felt unreachable, yet doubt still remained. Could I, a girl who had trained on rough, dusty streets, truly compete on the world stage? Unfortunately, the games were cancelled due to the Second World War and I began to reconsider my chance of ever achieving my dreams. Then, in 1948, I eventually qualified to represent America in the Olympics! I thought, could I do it? Would I be able to overlook the doubts I once had? Yet my dream, undeterred by my fear, was what carried me through.

I would like to begin by thanking you for inviting me to the Tuskegee Institute today. I am Alice Coachman, an Olympic athlete who began her journey on the dusty roads of Alabama, and I feel deeply honoured to stand before you. Today, I wish to share how my dreams, which once seemed out of reach, became a reality because of your unwavering support. Without your belief in me, my ambition might have remained only a dream.

In November 1923, I was born in Albany, Georgia, at a time when girls were discouraged from competing in sport. Despite these expectations, I was a determined young athlete with a passion for running and jumping that could not be ignored. Why should I sit aside and watch? Fortunately, my aunt, who recognised my potential, encouraged me to continue training when others misunderstood my ambition. By the age of 12, I was the unrivalled athlete in Albany, regularly winning high school competitions. My dream, when it had once seemed impossible, was born.

passion for running

my confidence strengthened

with determination in her heart

In November 1923, I was born in Albany, Georgia, at a time when girls were discouraged from competing in sport. Despite these expectations, I was a determined young athlete with a passion for running and jumping that could not be ignored. Why should I sit aside and watch? Fortunately, my aunt, who recognised my potential, encouraged me to continue training when others misunderstood my ambition. By the age of 12, I was the unrivalled athlete in Albany, regularly winning high school competitions. My dream, when it had once seemed impossible, was born.

In the years that followed, I won national titles for running and the high jump, and the Olympic Games no longer felt unreachable, yet doubt still remained. Could I, a girl who had trained on rough, dusty streets, truly compete on the world stage? Unfortunately, the games were cancelled due to the Second World War and I began to reconsider my chance of ever achieving my dreams. Then, in 1948, I eventually qualified to represent America in the Olympics! I thought, could I do it? Would I be able to overlook the doubts I once had? Yet my dream, undeterred by my fear, was what carried me through.

As time pressed on, segregation arrived, creating barriers that disallowed me from using training facilities or even competing alongside white athletes. How was I supposed to achieve like them? I trained barefoot on dusty roads, carrying the hopes of a young girl with determination in her heart. It was then that you, the Tuskegee Institute, became part of my story. You invited me to study and train, providing an opportunity that realigned my future. With your guidance, my confidence strengthened. My dream, in spite of the adversity I faced, grew.

I would like to begin by thanking you for inviting me to the Tuskegee Institute today. I am Alice Coachman, an Olympic athlete who began her journey on the dusty roads of Alabama, and I feel deeply honoured to stand before you. Today, I wish to share how my dreams, which once seemed out of reach, became a reality because of your unwavering support. Without your belief in me, my ambition might have remained only a dream.

In the years that followed, I won national titles for running and the high jump, and the Olympic Games no longer felt unreachable, yet doubt still remained. Could I, a girl who had trained on rough, dusty streets, truly compete on the world stage? Unfortunately, the games were cancelled due to the Second World War and I began to reconsider my chance of ever achieving my dreams. Then, in 1948, I eventually qualified to represent America in the Olympics! I thought, could I do it? Would I be able to overlook the doubts I once had? Yet my dream, undeterred by my fear, was what carried me through.

I would like to begin by thanking you for inviting me to the Tuskegee Institute today. I am Alice Coachman, an Olympic athlete who began her journey on the dusty roads of Alabama, and I feel deeply honoured to stand before you. Today, I wish to share how my dreams, which once seemed out of reach, became a reality because of your unwavering support. Without your belief in me, my ambition might have remained only a dream.

As time pressed on, segregation arrived, creating barriers that disallowed me from using training facilities or even competing alongside white athletes. How was I supposed to achieve like them? I trained barefoot on dusty roads, carrying the hopes of a young girl with determination in her heart. It was then that you, the Tuskegee Institute, became part of my story. You invited me to study and train, providing an opportunity that realigned my future. With your guidance, my confidence strengthened. My dream, in spite of the adversity I faced, grew.

At the 1948 London Olympics, I stood, ready at the long jump start line, filled with nervous excitement, thinking only of the support I had received from the Tuskegee Institute. I ran, I jumped, I landed… and I won! I had earned an Olympic gold medal, becoming the first black woman to achieve this honour. This victory, which changed my life forever, belonged not only to me, but to everyone who believed in my potential. For all who are in pursuit of their dreams – I sincerely believe that determination, along with the help of others, will pull you through. My dream, after everything I went through, had finally come true.