Y3F The Secret Elephant Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Can I find and discuss Writer's Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

brought

Who/What

war

Sentence

The war brought misfortune.

Add Detail: prefixes

misfortune.

The war brought such

____

Re-read

Build

The war brought such

misfortune.

____

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Check

My turn to write a sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

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Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

were

Who/What

planes

Sentence

The planes were loud.

Add Detail: possessive apostrophe

planes'

noises were too loud.

The

__________

Re-read

Build

noises were too loud.

planes'

__________

The

___________________________________________________________________________

Check

My turn to write a sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Can I find and discuss Writer's Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has.

The Example Text has...

Opening and closing

Paragraphs

Words and phrases for feelings

Exclamation sentence

First person

Features

Text structure

Dear Diary, What a day it has been! Things have been getting busy here at the zoo, just like they used to be when I was a young elephant. Back then, each day was full of fun thanks to the most wonderful friend I could ever ask for… my keeper. She would bring me an apple in the mornings and I would help her to tidy my enclosure. We did everything together and there was never a moment of unhappiness in our little world. My keeper made the zoo feel like home, but life wasn’t always that easy for us.

Paragraph

Exclamation sentence

First person

Opening and closing

Words and phrases for feelings

Click on / Click off

Writer's Knowledge

Short sentences

Present perfect tense

Showing the main character is scared

Kind things the keeper does

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Present perfect tense

Let me show you

Match the simple past tense verb to its present perfect tense form.

I have been to my keeper's house.

I lived at the zoo for many years.

I saw my keeper again after many years.

I have lived at the zoo for many years.

I went to my keeper's house.

I have seen my keeper again after many years.

Reveal

Present perfect tense

Let's find and discuss

Now, years have passed since the war and I hadn’t seen my keeper for so very long… until today! Just this morning, can you believe it… I have had the most unexpected surprise. My keeper has come to visit me, and my family right here at the zoo! The moment I saw her, all those years washed away. I have always remembered how kind she was to me during those terrifying nights. Her gentle care and her soothing comfort have never left me. Above all else, I have always remembered her friendship and friendship is something an elephant never forgets. Sheila

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Present perfect tense

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Short sentences

Present perfect tense

Showing the main character is scared

Kind things the keeper does

Showing the main character is scared

Let me show you

Drag the words and phrases that best describe how scared the elephant is.

full of fun

trumpeted out in fear

made me smile

terrified

trembled with uncertainty

never a moment of unhappiness

Reveal

Showing the main character is scared

Let's find and discuss

One terrible day, everything went dark. I remember the thunderous booms and I’ll never forget the enormous bangs that crashed all around. Bright lights blazed and huge clouds of smoke billowed everywhere. It was terrifying. My legs trembled with uncertainty and I trumpeted out in fear. Chaos and disorder tore the world apart. I was all alone. As each day darkened into night, I dreaded the return of those awful noises. Thankfully, my keeper always came back.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Reveal

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Showing the main character is scared

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Short sentences

Present perfect tense

Showing the main character is scared

Kind things the keeper does

Let me show you

Short sentences

Let's discuss how these short sentences keep the reader interested.

She was my family.

I found a home.

I was safe.

Short sentences

Let's find and discuss

When the zoo was closed at night, my keeper would creep back into my enclosure to be with me. She knew how frightened I was of the huge bangs so she would stay with me through the night. She knew how much the noise hurt my ears so she would sit and calm me and rub my skin. She knew how lonely I was so she would tell me stories and soothe away my discomfort. It was because of my keeper that I had hope to hold onto. She kept me safe. She was my family. She was everything.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Short sentences

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Short sentences

Present perfect tense

Showing the main character is scared

Kind things the keeper does

Let me show you

Kind things the keeper does

Drag the phrases that show kind things the keeper does.

talked to me softly

I was terrified

a young elephant

years have passed

made me a blanket

shared her home with me

Reveal

Kind things the keeper does

Let's find and discuss

When the zoo was closed at night, my keeper would creep back into my enclosure to be with me. She knew how frightened I was of the huge bangs so she would stay with me through the night. She knew how much the noise hurt my ears so she would sit and calm me and rub my skin. She knew how lonely I was so she would tell me stories and soothe away my discomfort. It was because of my keeper that I had hope to hold onto. She kept me safe. She was my family. She was everything.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Kind things the keeper does

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Odd One Out

Which of these is not an example of the present perfect tense?

A things have been busy

B I have had a visitor

C I have a keeper

D I have always remembered

Picture Me

Which image best shows this phrase to describe the elephant's feelings?dreaded the return of those awful noises

True or False?

Using some short sentences helps to keep the reader interested.

True

False

Yes or No?

Are these phrases to show kind things the keeper does?

A the moment I saw her

Yes

No

B stay with me through the night

No

Yes

C in our little world

Yes

No

D rub my ears to soothe me

Yes

No

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-7 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

Dear Diary, What a day it has been! Things have been getting busy here at the zoo, just like they used to be when I was a young elephant. Back then, each day was full of fun thanks to the most wonderful friend I could ever ask for… my keeper. She would bring me an apple in the mornings and I would help her to tidy my enclosure. We did everything together and there was never a moment of unhappiness in our little world. My keeper made the zoo feel like home, but life wasn’t always that easy for us.

When the zoo was closed at night, my keeper would creep back into my enclosure to be with me. She knew how frightened I was of the huge bangs so she would stay with me through the night. She knew how much the noise hurt my ears so she would sit and calm me and rub my skin. She knew how lonely I was so she would tell me stories and soothe away my discomfort. It was because of my keeper that I had hope to hold onto. She kept me safe. She was my family. She was everything.

When the zoo was closed at night, my keeper would creep back into my enclosure to be with me. She knew how frightened I was of the huge bangs so she would stay with me through the night. She knew how much the noise hurt my ears so she would sit and calm me and rub my skin. She knew how lonely I was so she would tell me stories and soothe away my discomfort. It was because of my keeper that I had hope to hold onto. She kept me safe. She was my family. She was everything.

misfortune.

The war brought such

____

talked to me softly

made me a blanket

shared her home with me

Now, years have passed since the war and I hadn’t seen my keeper for so very long… until today! Just this morning, can you believe it… I have had the most unexpected surprise. My keeper has come to visit me, and my family right here at the zoo! The moment I saw her, all those years washed away. I have always remembered how kind she was to me during those terrifying nights. Her gentle care and her soothing comfort have never left me. Above all else, I have always remembered her friendship and friendship is something an elephant never forgets. Sheila

Dear Diary, What a day it has been! Things have been getting busy here at the zoo, just like they used to be when I was a young elephant. Back then, each day was full of fun thanks to the most wonderful friend I could ever ask for… my keeper. She would bring me an apple in the mornings and I would help her to tidy my enclosure. We did everything together and there was never a moment of unhappiness in our little world. My keeper made the zoo feel like home, but life wasn’t always that easy for us.

Now, years have passed since the war and I hadn’t seen my keeper for so very long… until today! Just this morning, can you believe it… I have had the most unexpected surprise. My keeper has come to visit me, and my family right here at the zoo! The moment I saw her, all those years washed away. I have always remembered how kind she was to me during those terrifying nights. Her gentle care and her soothing comfort have never left me. Above all else, I have always remembered her friendship and friendship is something an elephant never forgets. Sheila

One terrible day, everything went dark. I remember the thunderous booms and I’ll never forget the enormous bangs that crashed all around. Bright lights blazed and huge clouds of smoke billowed everywhere. It was terrifying. My legs trembled with uncertainty and I trumpeted out in fear. Chaos and disorder tore the world apart. I was all alone. As each day darkened into night, I dreaded the return of those awful noises. Thankfully, my keeper always came back.

When the zoo was closed at night, my keeper would creep back into my enclosure to be with me. She knew how frightened I was of the huge bangs so she would stay with me through the night. She knew how much the noise hurt my ears so she would sit and calm me and rub my skin. She knew how lonely I was so she would tell me stories and soothe away my discomfort. It was because of my keeper that I had hope to hold onto. She kept me safe. She was my family. She was everything.

Dear Diary, What a day it has been! Things have been getting busy here at the zoo, just like they used to be when I was a young elephant. Back then, each day was full of fun thanks to the most wonderful friend I could ever ask for… my keeper. She would bring me an apple in the mornings and I would help her to tidy my enclosure. We did everything together and there was never a moment of unhappiness in our little world. My keeper made the zoo feel like home, but life wasn’t always that easy for us.

planes'

noises were too loud.

The

__________

Dear Diary, What a day it has been! Things have been getting busy here at the zoo, just like they used to be when I was a young elephant. Back then, each day was full of fun thanks to the most wonderful friend I could ever ask for… my keeper. She would bring me an apple in the mornings and I would help her to tidy my enclosure. We did everything together and there was never a moment of unhappiness in our little world. My keeper made the zoo feel like home, but life wasn’t always that easy for us.

trumpeted out in fear

terrified

trembled with uncertainty

One terrible day, everything went dark. I remember the thunderous booms and I’ll never forget the enormous bangs that crashed all around. Bright lights blazed and huge clouds of smoke billowed everywhere. It was terrifying. My legs trembled with uncertainty and I trumpeted out in fear. Chaos and disorder tore the world apart. I was all alone. As each day darkened into night, I dreaded the return of those awful noises. Thankfully, my keeper always came back.

One terrible day, everything went dark. I remember the thunderous booms and I’ll never forget the enormous bangs that crashed all around. Bright lights blazed and huge clouds of smoke billowed everywhere. It was terrifying. My legs trembled with uncertainty and I trumpeted out in fear. Chaos and disorder tore the world apart. I was all alone. As each day darkened into night, I dreaded the return of those awful noises. Thankfully, my keeper always came back.