Y5E The Lost Book of Adventure WO2 Analyse L5

Analyse Lesson 5

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

disappears

Who/What

sun

Sentence

The sun disappears.

Add Detail: cohesive devices

before

_________

the sun disappears.

It is essential that your shelter is built

Re-read

Build

before

_________

the sun disappears.

Check

It is essential that your shelter is built

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

hold

Subject

shelter

Sentence

The shelter must hold.

Add Detail: colon for independent clauses

Ensure the shelter is secure: the structure must hold against the wind.

_____________________________________

________________________

Re-read

Build

Insert the colon between the two independent clauses, explaining the information given.

Check

Ensure the shelter is secure the structure must hold against the wind.

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Title

Paragraph

Numbered steps

Imperative sentences

Present tense

Text structure

Features

Surviving in the Wild: Snow Shelters

Treacherous Tundra There are few environments that can test your survival skills as severely as a windswept tundra. Exposure to extreme cold can cause hypothermia, a medical condition caused when your body loses heat faster than it can produce it (when your core temperature drops below 35˚C). Finding shelter in these treacherous conditions can be the difference between life and death. Read on for guidance on a variety of different shelters that could just save your life.

Title

Paragraph

Present tense

Imperative sentences

Click on Click off

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

Writer's Knowledge

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Suffixes

Commas for clarity

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Memorize the positions

Suffixes

Let me show you

Drag the verbs to the matching suffix.

widen

-en

-ate

maximise

clarify

-ise

-ify

excavate

Reveal

Suffixes

Let's find and discuss

Step 1: Mark out your trench shape (remember that your trench needs to be deep enough for you to move around comfortably) and carefully start digging. When you are satisfied with the depth, consider carving steps, benches and even beds with a shovel, or a spade. Step 2: Lay strong lengths of wood across the trench (each end should be at least 30cm beyond the trench edge) then fill any gaps with smaller branches. Step 3: Cover the branches with thick foliage such as fir boughs. Step 4: Add a final covering of snow on top, then mark out the boundary of your trench shelter using sticks (to maximise safety).

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Suffixes

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Suffixes

Commas for clarity

Let me show you

Modal verbs

Let's order the modal verbs from most to least likely to happen.

could

might

can

must

should

Most likely

Least likely

Each end _________ be at least 30cm beyond the trench edge.

Modal verbs

Let's find and discuss

Treacherous Tundra There are few environments that can test your survival skills as severely as a windswept tundra. Exposure to extreme cold can cause hypothermia, a medical condition caused when your body loses heat faster than it can produce it (when your core temperature drops below 35˚C). Finding shelter in these treacherous conditions can be the difference between life and death. Read on for guidance on a variety of different shelters that could just save your life.

Feel

Imagine

Replace?

Remove?

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Modal verbs

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Suffixes

Commas for clarity

Adverbials

Let me show you

Drag the adverbials into the passage to help it flow.

As night falls

Later

At first

After the snowfall

_______________, gather the lowest branches of a conifer for a shelter. ________, clear a small hole around the base for wind protection. ______, let the tree shield you from more snow. ____________, this simple method keeps you safe without equipment.

Reveal

Adverbials

Let's find and discuss

Step 1: Mark a circle in the snow large enough to fit two people lying down then pile up a mound of snow inside the designated area approximately 1.8m high. Step 2: Shape the mound by packing the snow down, then leave for an hour or two to harden. Meanwhile, collect a number of thin sticks (aim for around 45cm length) and push them into the mound by 30cm. Step 3: Start digging out the entrance of the shelter and widen the gap with a shovel. Whilst one person digs further inside the structure, the other should remove the extracted snow and use it to strengthen the exterior surface.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Adverbials

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Modal verbs

Adverbials

Suffixes

Commas for clarity

Commas for clarity

Let me show you

Let's add the missing comma to make the meaning clear.

Once the inside is complete gently remove the sticks and create a breathing hole in the top.

Reveal

Commas for clarity

Let's find and discuss

Treacherous Tundra There are few environments that can test your survival skills as severely as a windswept tundra. Exposure to extreme cold can cause hypothermia, a medical condition caused when your body loses heat faster than it can produce it (when your core temperature drops below 35˚C). Finding shelter in these treacherous conditions can be the difference between life and death. Read on for guidance on a variety of different shelters that could just save your life.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Commas for clarity

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Odd One Out

Which one is not a verb suffix?

B -ify

A -ise

D -un

C -en

Yes or No?Are these modal verbs?

A have

Yes

No

No

B could

Yes

C must

Yes

No

D might

Yes

No

True or False?

Cohesive devices such as adverbials help the text to flow.

False

True

Which One's Right?

Which of these sentences shows commas used correctly to avoid ambiguity?

A Inside the ceiling, should be carefully excavated.

B Inside, the ceiling should be carefully excavated.

C Inside the ceiling should be carefully, excavated.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

Tree Base Snow Shelter After heavy snowfall, a simple shelter can be made using the lowest hanging branches of a conifer tree. Clearing a bowl-shaped hole around the base of the tree will provide protection from high winds and predators whilst the tree will offer sufficient protection from further snowfall. This method might be especially helpful if you have no access to equipment.

Snow Trenches and Tunnels These are perfect when there is deep snow. Not only are they simple to make, but they are also highly effective at protecting intrepid adventurers from the elements. Step 1: Mark out your trench shape (remember that your trench needs to be deep enough for you to move around comfortably) and carefully start digging. When you are satisfied with the depth, consider carving steps, benches and even beds with a shovel, or a spade. Step 2: Lay strong lengths of wood across the trench (each end should be at least 30cm beyond the trench edge) then fill any gaps with smaller branches. Step 3: Cover the branches with thick foliage such as fir boughs. Step 4: Add a final covering of snow on top, then mark out the boundary of your trench shelter using sticks (to maximise safety).

Quinzhee A cross between a snow hole and an igloo, yet easier than both to make! This shelter requires two or more people to build and will take approximately half a day to complete. Step 1: Mark a circle in the snow large enough to fit two people lying down then pile up a mound of snow inside the designated area approximately 1.8m high. Step 2: Shape the mound by packing the snow down, then leave for an hour or two to harden. Meanwhile, collect a number of thin sticks (aim for around 45cm length) and push them into the mound by 30cm. Step 3: Start digging out the entrance of the shelter and widen the gap with a shovel. Whilst one person digs further inside the structure, the other should remove the extracted snow and use it to strengthen the exterior surface. Step 4: Inside, carefully excavate the ceiling snow using a small shovel or your gloved hands until you make contact with the sticks. Step 5: Once the inside is complete, gently remove the sticks and create a breathing hole in the top.

Quinzhee A cross between a snow hole and an igloo, yet easier than both to make! This shelter requires two or more people to build and will take approximately half a day to complete. Step 1: Mark a circle in the snow large enough to fit two people lying down then pile up a mound of snow inside the designated area approximately 1.8m high. Step 2: Shape the mound by packing the snow down, then leave for an hour or two to harden. Meanwhile, collect a number of thin sticks (aim for around 45cm length) and push them into the mound by 30cm. Step 3: Start digging out the entrance of the shelter and widen the gap with a shovel. Whilst one person digs further inside the structure, the other should remove the extracted snow and use it to strengthen the exterior surface. Step 4: Inside, carefully excavate the ceiling snow using a small shovel or your gloved hands until you make contact with the sticks. Step 5: Once the inside is complete, gently remove the sticks and create a breathing hole in the top.

before

_________

the sun disappears.

It is essential that your shelter is built

Treacherous Tundra There are few environments that can test your survival skills as severely as a windswept tundra. Exposure to extreme cold can cause hypothermia, a medical condition caused when your body loses heat faster than it can produce it (when your core temperature drops below 35˚C). Finding shelter in these treacherous conditions can be the difference between life and death. Read on for guidance on a variety of different shelters that could just save your life.

Once the inside is complete, gently remove the sticks and create a breathing hole in the top.

Quinzhee A cross between a snow hole and an igloo, yet easier than both to make! This shelter requires two or more people to build and will take approximately half a day to complete. Step 1: Mark a circle in the snow large enough to fit two people lying down then pile up a mound of snow inside the designated area approximately 1.8m high. Step 2: Shape the mound by packing the snow down, then leave for an hour or two to harden. Meanwhile, collect a number of thin sticks (aim for around 45cm length) and push them into the mound by 30cm. Step 3: Start digging out the entrance of the shelter and widen the gap with a shovel. Whilst one person digs further inside the structure, the other should remove the extracted snow and use it to strengthen the exterior surface. Step 4: Inside, carefully excavate the ceiling snow using a small shovel or your gloved hands until you make contact with the sticks. Step 5: Once the inside is complete, gently remove the sticks and create a breathing hole in the top.

Snow Trenches and Tunnels These are perfect when there is deep snow. Not only are they simple to make, but they are also highly effective at protecting intrepid adventurers from the elements. Step 1: Mark out your trench shape (remember that your trench needs to be deep enough for you to move around comfortably) and carefully start digging. When you are satisfied with the depth, consider carving steps, benches and even beds with a shovel, or a spade. Step 2: Lay strong lengths of wood across the trench (each end should be at least 30cm beyond the trench edge) then fill any gaps with smaller branches. Step 3: Cover the branches with thick foliage such as fir boughs. Step 4: Add a final covering of snow on top, then mark out the boundary of your trench shelter using sticks (to maximise safety).

Ensure the shelter is secure: the structure must hold against the wind.

_____________________________________

________________________

excavate

widen

maximise

clarify

Tree Base Snow Shelter After heavy snowfall, a simple shelter can be made using the lowest hanging branches of a conifer tree. Clearing a bowl-shaped hole around the base of the tree will provide protection from high winds and predators whilst the tree will offer sufficient protection from further snowfall. This method might be especially helpful if you have no access to equipment.

Tree Base Snow Shelter After heavy snowfall, a simple shelter can be made using the lowest hanging branches of a conifer tree. Clearing a bowl-shaped hole around the base of the tree will provide protection from high winds and predators whilst the tree will offer sufficient protection from further snowfall. This method might be especially helpful if you have no access to equipment.

Snow Trenches and Tunnels These are perfect when there is deep snow. Not only are they simple to make, but they are also highly effective at protecting intrepid adventurers from the elements. Step 1: Mark out your trench shape (remember that your trench needs to be deep enough for you to move around comfortably) and carefully start digging. When you are satisfied with the depth, consider carving steps, benches and even beds with a shovel, or a spade. Step 2: Lay strong lengths of wood across the trench (each end should be at least 30cm beyond the trench edge) then fill any gaps with smaller branches. Step 3: Cover the branches with thick foliage such as fir boughs. Step 4: Add a final covering of snow on top, then mark out the boundary of your trench shelter using sticks (to maximise safety).

Tree Base Snow Shelter After heavy snowfall, a simple shelter can be made using the lowest hanging branches of a conifer tree. Clearing a bowl-shaped hole around the base of the tree will provide protection from high winds and predators whilst the tree will offer sufficient protection from further snowfall. This method might be especially helpful if you have no access to equipment.

Treacherous Tundra There are few environments that can test your survival skills as severely as a windswept tundra. Exposure to extreme cold can cause hypothermia, a medical condition caused when your body loses heat faster than it can produce it (when your core temperature drops below 35˚C). Finding shelter in these treacherous conditions can be the difference between life and death. Read on for guidance on a variety of different shelters that could just save your life.

After the snowfall

At first

Later

As night falls