Y5E The Lost Book of Adventure WO1 Analyse L5

Analyse Lesson 5

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

lay

Who/What

dangers

Sentence

Dangers lay ahead.

Add Detail: commas for clarity

Through the forest, into the wilderness and across the river, dangers lay ahead.

Re-read

Build

Use the commas to separate the clauses.

Check

Through the forest into the wilderness and across the river dangers lay ahead.

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My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Quick Build: single-clause sentence

Verb

grew

Subject

tension

Sentence

Tension grew in the air.

Add Detail: colon for independent clauses

I hesitated: a tension grew in the air.

______________________

__________

Re-read

Build

Insert the colon between the two independent clauses, expanding the information given.

Check

I hesitated a tension grew in the air.

___________________________________________________________________________

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt/Extend?

Combine?

Fix?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Title

Paragraph

Past tense

First person

Interesting verbs

Text structure

Features

Into the Unknown

The river carved a meandering path through the dense jungle. As the emerald waters eddied lazily, I guided my raft around the bend. I landed the vessel on a nearby sand bank, then moored it to a rock. The immense jungle, which rose up before me, was a shadowy wall of vines and mystery. I shivered, misinterpreting the early warning sign as excitement. I was overoptimistic and underprepared. Arrogance was my first mistake.

First person

Past tense

Interesting verbs

Title

Paragraph

Click on Click off

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

Writer's Knowledge

Relative clauses

Prefixes

Suffixes

Adverbs

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Memorize the positions

Suffixes

Let me show you

Drag the verbs to the matching suffix.

widen

-en

-ate

revise

simplify

-ise

-ify

motivate

Reveal

Suffixes

Let's find and discuss

Three days of heavy work followed. I hacked and slashed through thick vines. Cautiously, I picked my way between venomous barbs of ancient, overgrown flora. My arms ached and my head swam with the intense humidity. The ragged remains of my hand-drawn map were useless – this was undiscovered territory and I was here alone. As each evening drew closer, I crafted a shelter to suit my environment. It was essential that I was elevated off the jungle floor as protection from the numerous hostile insects and arachnids. I accepted that I was prey, but in the end, it wasn’t the spiders that got me.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Suffixes

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Relative clauses

Prefixes

Suffixes

Adverbs

Memorize the positions

Let me show you

Prefixes

Try adding the prefixes to the verbs to see if they make new words.

Prefix

Verb

over-

un-

turn

coil

de-

dis-

re-

interpret

mis-

Reveal

Prefixes

Let's find and discuss

The river carved a meandering path through the dense jungle. As the emerald waters eddied lazily, I guided my raft around the bend. I landed the vessel on a nearby sand bank, then moored it to a rock. The immense jungle, which rose up before me, was a shadowy wall of vines and mystery. I shivered, misinterpreting the early warning sign as excitement. I was overoptimistic and underprepared. Arrogance was my first mistake.

Feel

Imagine

Replace?

Remove?

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Prefixes

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Relative clauses

Prefixes

Suffixes

Adverbs

Relative Clauses

Let me show you

Add the relative clauses to the sentences to add more information.

,which shone in the darkness,

Ravenous eyes startled me.

,that fell heavily,

Relentless snow slowed my journey.

Relative Clauses

Let's find and discuss

Time slowed down. The mamba, who was certainly unhappy at being disturbed, was beginning to uncoil. I shivered almost imperceptibly. Time to revise my options: either risk a bite that would surely kill me or allow myself to fall three metres to the floor. Fighting every natural instinct, I pushed back from the unfurling snake as it lunged. Gravity did its job. My body smashed into the hard ground. When I came to, I was lying in a heap, bruised and with a suspected broken ankle.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Relative Clauses

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Relative clauses

Prefixes

Suffixes

Adverbs

Memorize the positions

Adverbs

Let me show you

Let's order the adverbs from most to least likely to happen.

maybe

certainly

surely

obviously

possibly

clearly

Most likely

Least likely

That would _________ kill me.

Adverbs

Let's find and discuss

Time slowed down. The mamba, who was certainly unhappy at being disturbed, was beginning to uncoil. I shivered almost imperceptibly. Time to revise my options: either risk a bite that would surely kill me or allow myself to fall three metres to the floor. Fighting every natural instinct, I pushed back from the unfurling snake as it lunged. Gravity did its job. My body smashed into the hard ground. When I came to, I was lying in a heap, bruised and with a suspected broken ankle.

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Reveal

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Adverbs

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Odd One Out

Which one is not a verb suffix?

B -en

A -ate

C -bit

D -ify

Yes or No?Do they begin with prefixes?

A misinterpreting

Yes

B disorienting

C adventuring

No

D exploring

Check

True or False?

Relative clauses add additional information to a sentence.

False

True

Tick Me

Which of these sentences contain adverbs that indicate possibility?

Tick three.

A The journey would surely be difficult.

B The snake was certainly unhappy.

C He did not take kindly to being disturbed.

Check

D Maybe I would run out of time.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

The river carved a meandering path through the dense jungle. As the emerald waters eddied lazily, I guided my raft around the bend. I landed the vessel on a nearby sand bank, then moored it to a rock. The immense jungle, which rose up before me, was a shadowy wall of vines and mystery. I shivered, misinterpreting the early warning sign as excitement. I was overoptimistic and underprepared. Arrogance was my first mistake.

The return journey to my raft was a blur of dehydration and disorienting pain. I fought to stay calm. The slow travel made me more vulnerable to insect bites and I was conscious of the dangers nearby. Six days after my near-death experience, I collapsed on the shore by my raft. Malnourished, dehydrated, but alive.

overinterpret

uninterpret

deinterpret

disinterpret

reinterpret

misinterpret

The return journey to my raft was a blur of dehydration and disorienting pain. I fought to stay calm. The slow travel made me more vulnerable to insect bites and I was conscious of the dangers nearby. Six days after my near-death experience, I collapsed on the shore by my raft. Malnourished, dehydrated, but alive.

Three days of heavy work followed. I hacked and slashed through thick vines. Cautiously, I picked my way between venomous barbs of ancient, overgrown flora. My arms ached and my head swam with the intense humidity. The ragged remains of my hand-drawn map were useless – this was undiscovered territory and I was here alone. As each evening drew closer, I crafted a shelter to suit my environment. It was essential that I was elevated off the jungle floor as protection from the numerous hostile insects and arachnids. I accepted that I was prey, but in the end, it wasn’t the spiders that got me.

Three days of heavy work followed. I hacked and slashed through thick vines. Cautiously, I picked my way between venomous barbs of ancient, overgrown flora. My arms ached and my head swam with the intense humidity. The ragged remains of my hand-drawn map were useless – this was undiscovered territory and I was here alone. As each evening drew closer, I crafted a shelter to suit my environment. It was essential that I was elevated off the jungle floor as protection from the numerous hostile insects and arachnids. I accepted that I was prey, but in the end, it wasn’t the spiders that got me.

Time slowed down. The mamba, who was certainly unhappy at being disturbed, was beginning to uncoil. I shivered almost imperceptibly. Time to revise my options: either risk a bite that would surely kill me or allow myself to fall three metres to the floor. Fighting every natural instinct, I pushed back from the unfurling snake as it lunged. Gravity did its job. My body smashed into the hard ground. When I came to, I was lying in a heap, bruised and with a suspected broken ankle.

The return journey to my raft was a blur of dehydration and disorienting pain. I fought to stay calm. The slow travel made me more vulnerable to insect bites and I was conscious of the dangers nearby. Six days after my near-death experience, I collapsed on the shore by my raft. Malnourished, dehydrated, but alive.

The river carved a meandering path through the dense jungle. As the emerald waters eddied lazily, I guided my raft around the bend. I landed the vessel on a nearby sand bank, then moored it to a rock. The immense jungle, which rose up before me, was a shadowy wall of vines and mystery. I shivered, misinterpreting the early warning sign as excitement. I was overoptimistic and underprepared. Arrogance was my first mistake.

uncoil

overcoil

decoil

discoil

recoil

miscoil

The return journey to my raft was a blur of dehydration and disorienting pain. I fought to stay calm. The slow travel made me more vulnerable to insect bites and I was conscious of the dangers nearby. Six days after my near-death experience, I collapsed on the shore by my raft. Malnourished, dehydrated, but alive.

I hesitated: a tension grew in the air.

______________________

__________

overturn

unturn

deturn

disturn

return

misturn

Through the forest, into the wilderness and across the river, dangers lay ahead.

motivate

widen

revise

simplify

I was two days deeper into the unknown and two days further from civilisation. After a dense stretch of inhospitable jungle, the greenery gave way to a sheer rock wall. I began to climb using jagged ledges and mossy crevices as hand and footholds. Motivated by the challenge, I hauled myself further until there was a three-metre distance between myself and the ground. The tendons in my hands cramped and my calves burned. I gave another almighty heave and pulled myself up onto a ledge. It was at this moment that everything went wrong. In my haste, I hadn’t followed one of the golden rules of exploring – always look before you leap. I glanced upward and came face to face with the dark, ruthless eyes of a black mamba.

I was two days deeper into the unknown and two days further from civilisation. After a dense stretch of inhospitable jungle, the greenery gave way to a sheer rock wall. I began to climb using jagged ledges and mossy crevices as hand and footholds. Motivated by the challenge, I hauled myself further until there was a three-metre distance between myself and the ground. The tendons in my hands cramped and my calves burned. I gave another almighty heave and pulled myself up onto a ledge. It was at this moment that everything went wrong. In my haste, I hadn’t followed one of the golden rules of exploring – always look before you leap. I glanced upward and came face to face with the dark, ruthless eyes of a black mamba.

I was two days deeper into the unknown and two days further from civilisation. After a dense stretch of inhospitable jungle, the greenery gave way to a sheer rock wall. I began to climb using jagged ledges and mossy crevices as hand and footholds. Motivated by the challenge, I hauled myself further until there was a three-metre distance between myself and the ground. The tendons in my hands cramped and my calves burned. I gave another almighty heave and pulled myself up onto a ledge. It was at this moment that everything went wrong. In my haste, I hadn’t followed one of the golden rules of exploring – always look before you leap. I glanced upward and came face to face with the dark, ruthless eyes of a black mamba.

The river carved a meandering path through the dense jungle. As the emerald waters eddied lazily, I guided my raft around the bend. I landed the vessel on a nearby sand bank, then moored it to a rock. The immense jungle, which rose up before me, was a shadowy wall of vines and mystery. I shivered, misinterpreting the early warning sign as excitement. I was overoptimistic and underprepared. Arrogance was my first mistake.

I was two days deeper into the unknown and two days further from civilisation. After a dense stretch of inhospitable jungle, the greenery gave way to a sheer rock wall. I began to climb using jagged ledges and mossy crevices as hand and footholds. Motivated by the challenge, I hauled myself further until there was a three-metre distance between myself and the ground. The tendons in my hands cramped and my calves burned. I gave another almighty heave and pulled myself up onto a ledge. It was at this moment that everything went wrong. In my haste, I hadn’t followed one of the golden rules of exploring – always look before you leap. I glanced upward and came face to face with the dark, ruthless eyes of a black mamba.

Time slowed down. The mamba, who was certainly unhappy at being disturbed, was beginning to uncoil. I shivered almost imperceptibly. Time to revise my options: either risk a bite that would surely kill me or allow myself to fall three metres to the floor. Fighting every natural instinct, I pushed back from the unfurling snake as it lunged. Gravity did its job. My body smashed into the hard ground. When I came to, I was lying in a heap, bruised and with a suspected broken ankle.

Three days of heavy work followed. I hacked and slashed through thick vines. Cautiously, I picked my way between venomous barbs of ancient, overgrown flora. My arms ached and my head swam with the intense humidity. The ragged remains of my hand-drawn map were useless – this was undiscovered territory and I was here alone. As each evening drew closer, I crafted a shelter to suit my environment. It was essential that I was elevated off the jungle floor as protection from the numerous hostile insects and arachnids. I accepted that I was prey, but in the end, it wasn’t the spiders that got me.