Y3D It Fell from the Sky Analyse L6

Analyse Lesson 6

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

Let me say the sentences before I choose one.

a or an?

complaint

I would like to make

that was not yours

an

__

You have taken

object

Re-read

Build

Choose the correct option to complete the sentence.

an

__

I would like to make

complaint

___________________________________________________________________________

Check

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Re-read

Build

Choose the correct option to complete the sentence.

an

__

object

You have taken

that was not yours

___________________________________________________________________________

Check

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Expanded noun phrases

Let me say the sentence before I click.

It landed

in the middle of the garden

_______________________________

Re-read

Build

It landed

in the middle of the garden

_______________________________

___________________________________________________________________________

Check

My turn to write the sentence.

Listen to my writer's voice.

Let me hide it!Now your turn.

Your turn to write a sentence.

Write?

Dictate?

Adapt?

Use your Sentence Checker

Sentence time over! Click to move on.

Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Openings and closings

Paragraph

Different tenses

Descriptive words and phrases

First person

Text structure

Features

A Letter from the Luna Moth

Dear Spider, I am writing this letter to complain about how you have treated the object that fell from the sky. I knew it was a chrysalis and I was amazed by its beauty. I had hoped to spend more time admiring it. I even kept it warm all through the night while I waited for it to hatch. I really wanted to gaze at it under the moonlight with my firefly friends. However, your actions have made that impossible and I am extremely disappointed! Let me tell you why.

Paragraph

Descriptive words and phrases

Openings and closings

Different tenses

First person

Click on Click off

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-7 in the Example Text?

Writer's Knowledge

Addressing the reader

Conjunctions

The writer's feelings

Let's work in:

Stations

Pairs

Groups

Let me show you

Conjunctions

because

when

but

you have been very greedy.

We are feeling frustrated

you took it away.

Luna Moth was very upset

You claim the object is yours

we all know it is not.

Check

Conjunctions

Let's find and discuss

Dear Spider, I am writing this letter to complain about how you have treated the object that fell from the sky. I knew it was a chrysalis and I was amazed by its beauty. I had hoped to spend more time admiring it. I even kept it warm all through the night while I waited for it to hatch. I really wanted to gaze at it under the moonlight with my firefly friends. However, your actions have made that impossible and I am extremely disappointed! Let me tell you why.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Conjunctions

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Addressing the reader

Conjunctions

The writer's feelings

Memorize the positions

Check

Addressing the reader

Let me show you

Sort the statements into the correct column:

Address the reader directly

Do not address the reader

You told us it was ours!

The object was taken by someone.

You have taken advantage of us!

The chrysalis was admired by many.

Addressing the reader

Let's find and discuss

Firstly, I must say how selfish it was of you to claim the object as your own. I feel that this was an unkind and unfair thing for you to do. It landed in the middle of the garden where we all live yet you decided it only belonged to you. You told us it was yours! You span your web like a web of lies.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Addressing the reader

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Addressing the reader

Conjunctions

The writer's feelings

The writer's feelings

Let me show you

Click the feelings phrases from weakest to strongest to raise the power meter.

I am

extremely disappointed

sad

annoyed

extremely disappointed

The writer's feelings

Let's find and discuss

Another serious problem is your greed. You charged the small fee of a single leaf for us to even see the object there when WonderVille eventually opened. By evening time, you doubled the price while other insects waited in line! You have taken advantage of us. You have taken a beautiful object to make yourself wealthy beyond imagination.

Reveal

Replace?

Remove?

Feel

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

The writer's feelings

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Reveal

Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

How will we answer our questions today?

Vote

ThumbsUp

ThinkPair Share

Bob Up

Odd One Out

Which one is not a conjunction?

B while

A before

C result

D although

Tick Me

Check

Which sentences address the reader directly?

Tick two

A The garden became a place ruled by greed.

B I hope you realise just how greedy you have been.

C The price of admission doubled by evening time.

D You will be left with no visitors and no friends.

True or False?

These phrases show how upset the writer is:'ruled by your greed' 'unkind and unfair'

True

False

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-7 in the Example Text?

CEW

Handwriting

Writing Effects

Spelling

Ideas

Other...

Feedback: Who did what well?

I will not return to WonderVille as a result of your actions. I had hoped it would be an inspiring, magical place where many insects gathered to admire something so special. Instead, it has now become somewhere ruled by your greed. Consequently, you will be left with no visitors and no friends if you do not change your behaviour. I hope you realise just how greedy you have been after everything you have done. Yours sincerely, Luna Moth

I will not return to WonderVille as a result of your actions. I had hoped it would be an inspiring, magical place where many insects gathered to admire something so special. Instead, it has now become somewhere ruled by your greed. Consequently, you will be left with no visitors and no friends if you do not change your behaviour. I hope you realise just how greedy you have been after everything you have done. Yours sincerely, Luna Moth

Firstly, I must say how selfish it was of you to claim the object as your own. I feel that this was an unkind and unfair thing for you to do. It landed in the middle of the garden where we all live yet you decided it only belonged to you. You told us it was yours! You span your web like a web of lies.

Dear Spider, I am writing this letter to complain about how you have treated the object that fell from the sky. I knew it was a chrysalis and I was amazed by its beauty. I had hoped to spend more time admiring it. I even kept it warm all through the night while I waited for it to hatch. I really wanted to gaze at it under the moonlight with my firefly friends. However, your actions have made that impossible and I am extremely disappointed! Let me tell you why.

I will not return to WonderVille as a result of your actions. I had hoped it would be an inspiring, magical place where many insects gathered to admire something so special. Instead, it has now become somewhere ruled by your greed. Consequently, you will be left with no visitors and no friends if you do not change your behaviour. I hope you realise just how greedy you have been after everything you have done. Yours sincerely, Luna Moth

It landed

in the middle of the garden

_______________________________

Firstly, I must say how selfish it was of you to claim the object as your own. I feel that this was an unkind and unfair thing for you to do. It landed in the middle of the garden where we all live yet you decided it only belonged to you. You told us it was yours! You span your web like a web of lies.

Another serious problem is your greed. You charged the small fee of a single leaf for us to even see the object there when WonderVille eventually opened. By evening time, you doubled the price while other insects waited in line! You have taken advantage of us. You have taken a beautiful object to make yourself wealthy beyond imagination.

object

You have taken

that was not yours

an

__

I would like to make

complaint

Address the reader directly

Do not address the reader

The object was taken by someone.

You told us it was ours!

You have taken advantage of us!

The chrysalis was admired by many.

Another serious problem is your greed. You charged the small fee of a single leaf for us to even see the object there when WonderVille eventually opened. By evening time, you doubled the price while other insects waited in line! You have taken advantage of us. You have taken a beautiful object to make yourself wealthy beyond imagination.

because

you have been very greedy.

We are feeling frustrated

you took it away.

Luna Moth was very upset

when

but

You claim the object is yours

we all know it is not.

Dear Spider, I am writing this letter to complain about how you have treated the object that fell from the sky. I knew it was a chrysalis and I was amazed by its beauty. I had hoped to spend more time admiring it. I even kept it warm all through the night while I waited for it to hatch. I really wanted to gaze at it under the moonlight with my firefly friends. However, your actions have made that impossible and I am extremely disappointed! Let me tell you why.