Y6D The Ways of the Wolf WO1 Analyse L4

Analyse Lesson 4

Sentence Accuracy

Sentence Accuracy

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Commas for clarity

The pack move onward silent and surefooted towards the scent of food before nightfall.

silent and surefooted towards the scent of food

The pack move onward

before nightfall

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silent and surefooted towards the scent of food

before nightfall

The pack move onward

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Hyphens for clarity

Their prey's safe haven will be threatened.

Their prey's safe-haven will be threatened.

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Their prey's safe haven will be threatened.

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Your turn to write a sentence.

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Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has

The Example Text has...

Sections

Title

Descriptive words and phrases

First person

Formal words and phrases

Text structure

Features

Observing the Pack

Here in the lush foothills of the mountains, we observe the wolf pack; they are a close-knit family with the alpha male and female at the heart. These wolves have travelled together for many miles and now pause on an outcrop to survey the land. From this vantage point, they can rest – they must contemplate their next meal. Wolves have inhabited these lands for thousands of years, benefitting from many resources: water, shelter and an abundance of food. They truly are part of the land and the land is part of them.

Sections

First person

Formal words and phrases

Descriptive words and phrases

Title

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Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

Writer's Knowledge

Semi-colon

Expanded Noun Phrases

Dashes

Colons

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Stations

Pairs

Groups

Expanded Noun Phrases

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Let's create expanded noun phrases. Add the adjectives and the prepositional phrase to the noun.

Noun

Adjectives

Prepositional phrase

alpha female

powerful, fierce

at the heart of the pack

the

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Expanded Noun Phrases

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Here in the lush foothills of the mountains, we observe the wolf pack; they are a close-knit family with the alpha male and female at the heart. These wolves have travelled together for many miles and now pause on an outcrop to survey the land. From this vantage point, they can rest – they must contemplate their next meal. Wolves have inhabited these lands for thousands of years, benefitting from many resources: water, shelter and an abundance of food. They truly are part of the land and the land is part of them.

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Feel

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Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Expanded Noun Phrases

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

Reveal

Writer's Knowledge

Semi-colon

Expanded Noun Phrases

Dashes

Colons

Semi-colons

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Add semi-colons to correctly punctuate the sentences.

Wolves have inhabited these lands for centuries this truly is their home.

Young wolves are mischievous in play they love rough and tumble.

The alpha male is clearly dominant he asserts his power through stature.

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Semi-colons

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We can now see movement in the pack; the juvenile places two meagre paws on the back of his unflinching older sister. Not even the weight of her young sibling can tear the mature female’s eyes away from the deer – she is focused. Determined. The immaturity of this juvenile is apparent as he is totally unaware of what is going on around him: the hunt, the chase or the kill. But he will learn; the pack will teach him. He lifts his head and a paltry whine escapes his mouth. We leave the pack now and will join them again later to discover more about the wonderful ways of the wolf.

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Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Semi-colons

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Writer's Knowledge

Semi-colon

Expanded Noun Phrases

Dashes

Colons

Dashes

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Add dashes to correctly punctuate the sentences.

Wolves have been misrepresented for years much of this is due to folklore.

Wolves are closely connected this is something humans have yet to learn.

The sound of a wolf howling is eerily familiar it can be heard 10km away.

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Dashes

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Now something immediately attracts their attention, as, ears pricked, they turn in unison. They have acute hearing, sensing movement long before any animals appear. And there, in a far-off valley, we see the source of their fascination – a herd of deer graze absent-mindedly below. Deer have been hunted by wolves for centuries; they will provide much needed sustenance for this hungry pack.

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Dashes

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Writer's Knowledge

Semi-colon

Expanded Noun Phrases

Dashes

Colons

Colons

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Add colons to begin a list.

Wolves eat many different kinds of food deer, rabbits and even fish.

Wolves live in places with lots of space forests, mountains and snowy plains.

Wolves use sounds to talk to each other howls, growls and whines.

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Colons

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Here in the lush foothills of the mountains, we observe the wolf pack; they are a close-knit family with the alpha male and female at the heart. These wolves have travelled together for many miles and now pause on an outcrop to survey the land. From this vantage point, they can rest – they must contemplate their next meal. Wolves have inhabited these lands for thousands of years, benefitting from many resources: water, shelter and an abundance of food. They truly are part of the land and the land is part of them.

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Replace?

Feel

Remove?

Imagine

Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?

Colons

Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?

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Question Quiz Time

Secret Selector

Team Competition

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Which One's Right?

Which expanded noun phrase adds information with a prepositional phrase?

B the lush mountains

A the mountains

D the foothills

C the lush foothills of the mountains

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Which sentences use a semi-colon correctly to join two clauses? Tick two.

A A wolf howls at night; it helps the pack stay in touch.

B Wolves are smart they; can plan their hunts carefully.

C A baby wolf is called a pup; it stays close to its mother.

D Wolves live; in packs they work together to hunt.

True or False?

You can use a dash to join two clauses together.

False

True

Colons

Which One's Right?

A Wolves live in places with lots of space forests, mountains and snowy plains.

B Wolves live in places with lots of space forests: mountains and snowy plains.

C Wolves live in places with lots of space: forests, mountains and snowy plains.

D Wolves live in places: with lots of space forests, mountains and snowy plains.

Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 1-4 in the Example Text?

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Now something immediately attracts their attention, as, ears pricked, they turn in unison. They have acute hearing, sensing movement long before any animals appear. And there, in a far-off valley, we see the source of their fascination – a herd of deer graze absent-mindedly below. Deer have been hunted by wolves for centuries; they will provide much needed sustenance for this hungry pack.

Silent and still, the amber eyes of the predators lock onto their unsuspecting prey. A young male leans forwards, studying the sizeable herd. His unparalleled sense of smell picks up the faint scent that drifts on the gentle morning breeze. Generations of deer have populated this land, feasting on the succulent grass, grateful for the refreshing lake and the safety of the dense forest. But today, it seems, the security of their safe-haven will be shattered.

Silent and still, the amber eyes of the predators lock onto their unsuspecting prey. A young male leans forwards, studying the sizeable herd. His unparalleled sense of smell picks up the faint scent that drifts on the gentle morning breeze. Generations of deer have populated this land, feasting on the succulent grass, grateful for the refreshing lake and the safety of the dense forest. But today, it seems, the security of their safe-haven will be shattered.

3. His wings drooped, and he hid under a shell.

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1. His wings wrinkled up.

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Here in the lush foothills of the mountains, we observe the wolf pack; they are a close-knit family with the alpha male and female at the heart. These wolves have travelled together for many miles and now pause on an outcrop to survey the land. From this vantage point, they can rest – they must contemplate their next meal. Wolves have inhabited these lands for thousands of years, benefitting from many resources: water, shelter and an abundance of food. They truly are part of the land and the land is part of them.

Here in the lush foothills of the mountains, we observe the wolf pack; they are a close-knit family with the alpha male and female at the heart. These wolves have travelled together for many miles and now pause on an outcrop to survey the land. From this vantage point, they can rest – they must contemplate their next meal. Wolves have inhabited these lands for thousands of years, benefitting from many resources: water, shelter and an abundance of food. They truly are part of the land and the land is part of them.

Silent and still, the amber eyes of the predators lock onto their unsuspecting prey. A young male leans forwards, studying the sizeable herd. His unparalleled sense of smell picks up the faint scent that drifts on the gentle morning breeze. Generations of deer have populated this land, feasting on the succulent grass, grateful for the refreshing lake and the safety of the dense forest. But today, it seems, the security of their safe-haven will be shattered.

powerful, fierce

alpha female

at the heart of the pack

the

silent and surefooted towards the scent of food

The pack move onward

before nightfall

Now something immediately attracts their attention, as, ears pricked, they turn in unison. They have acute hearing, sensing movement long before any animals appear. And there, in a far-off valley, we see the source of their fascination – a herd of deer graze absent-mindedly below. Deer have been hunted by wolves for centuries; they will provide much needed sustenance for this hungry pack.

We can now see movement in the pack; the juvenile places two meagre paws on the back of his unflinching older sister. Not even the weight of her young sibling can tear the mature female’s eyes away from the deer – she is focused. Determined. The immaturity of this juvenile is apparent as he is totally unaware of what is going on around him: the hunt, the chase or the kill. But he will learn; the pack will teach him. He lifts his head and a paltry whine escapes his mouth. We leave the pack now and will join them again later to discover more about the wonderful ways of the wolf.

We can now see movement in the pack; the juvenile places two meagre paws on the back of his unflinching older sister. Not even the weight of her young sibling can tear the mature female’s eyes away from the deer – she is focused. Determined. The immaturity of this juvenile is apparent as he is totally unaware of what is going on around him: the hunt, the chase or the kill. But he will learn; the pack will teach him. He lifts his head and a paltry whine escapes his mouth. We leave the pack now and will join them again later to discover more about the wonderful ways of the wolf.

Wolves have been misrepresented for years - much of this is due to folklore.

Wolves are closely connected - this is something humans have yet to learn.

The sound of a wolf howling is eerily familiar - it can be heard 10km away.

Silent and still, the amber eyes of the predators lock onto their unsuspecting prey. A young male leans forwards, studying the sizeable herd. His unparalleled sense of smell picks up the faint scent that drifts on the gentle morning breeze. Generations of deer have populated this land, feasting on the succulent grass, grateful for the refreshing lake and the safety of the dense forest. But today, it seems, the security of their safe-haven will be shattered.

We can now see movement in the pack; the juvenile places two meagre paws on the back of his unflinching older sister. Not even the weight of her young sibling can tear the mature female’s eyes away from the deer – she is focused. Determined. The immaturity of this juvenile is apparent as he is totally unaware of what is going on around him: the hunt, the chase or the kill. But he will learn; the pack will teach him. He lifts his head and a paltry whine escapes his mouth. We leave the pack now and will join them again later to discover more about the wonderful ways of the wolf.

Now something immediately attracts their attention, as, ears pricked, they turn in unison. They have acute hearing, sensing movement long before any animals appear. And there, in a far-off valley, we see the source of their fascination – a herd of deer graze absent-mindedly below. Deer have been hunted by wolves for centuries; they will provide much needed sustenance for this hungry pack.

Their prey's safe-haven will be threatened.

2. He shuffled his tiny feet.

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