Analyse Lesson 6
Sentence Accuracy
Sentence Accuracy
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Conjunctions
she reached the forest,
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
When
______
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When
______
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
she reached the forest,
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Noun Phrases
The crooked path through the twisted trees
led to danger
__________________________________________
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led to danger
The crooked path through the twisted trees
__________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________________
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The Queen and The Apple
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
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Describing the 'good' character
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Character reactions
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Describing the 'good' character
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Drag the phrases that describe Snow White's character.
eyes narrowed with dislike
veiny, aged hands
a sly smile onto her cruel face
warm smile
eyes of innocence
illuminating her loveliness
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Describing the 'good' character
Let's find and discuss
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
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Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Describing the 'good' character
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Reveal
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Describing the 'villain'
Let me show you
Drag the descriptions of the evil queen into her cloak.
snickered quietly
the ugliness of envy
delighted at the thought of company
cunningly crooned
eyes of innocence
pearl teeth
Reveal
Describing the 'villain'
Let's find and discuss
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
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Feel
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Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Describing the villain
Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?
Reveal
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Questions
Let me show you
Let's discuss how these questions keep the reader interested.
Who could it be?
Were they bringing her good news?
Questions
Let's find and discuss
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought.
“No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
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Writer's Knowledge
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Character reactions
Describing character reactions
Let me show you
Drag the phrases that show us that the queen's reactions match her character.
eagerly opened the door
snickered quietly
accepted it with grateful wonderment
forced a sly smile
gave a warm smile
her eyes narrowed with dislike and disdain
Reveal
Describing character reactions
Let's find and discuss
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
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Question Quiz Time
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Which of these descriptions of Snow White are accurate?
A She has a warm smile.
B She has veiny, aged hands.
C She delights at the thought of company.
Check
Which One's Right?
Choose the best description of the evil queen.
B warm
A caring
C innocent
D cunning
True or False?
Questions do not help to keep the reader interested.
True
False
Picture Me
Which is the best match for the evil queen's 'smile of satisfaction' ?
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Feedback: Who did what well?
she reached the forest,
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
When
______
eyes of innocence
warm smile
illuminating her loveliness
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought.
“No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
The crooked path through the twisted trees
led to danger
__________________________________________
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her.
Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit.
“Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple.
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her.
Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit.
“Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple.
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
snickered quietly
the ugliness of envy
cunningly crooned
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her.
Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit.
“Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple.
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
snickered quietly
forced a sly smile
her eyes narrowed with dislike and disdain
A She has a warm smile.
B She has veiny, aged hands.
C She delights at the thought of company.
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought.
“No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her.
Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit.
“Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple.
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought.
“No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
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Analyse Lesson 6
Sentence Accuracy
Sentence Accuracy
Let me say the sentence before I click.
Conjunctions
she reached the forest,
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
When
______
Re-read
Build
When
______
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
she reached the forest,
___________________________________________________________________________
Check
My turn to write the sentence.
Listen to my writer's voice.
Let me hide it!Now your turn.
Your turn to write a sentence.
Write?
Dictate?
Adapt?
Use your Sentence Checker
Sentence time over! Click to move on.
Let me say the sentence before I click.
Noun Phrases
The crooked path through the twisted trees
led to danger
__________________________________________
Re-read
Build
led to danger
The crooked path through the twisted trees
__________________________________________
___________________________________________________________________________
Check
My turn to write the sentence.
Listen to my writer's voice.
Let me hide it!Now your turn.
Your turn to write a sentence.
Write?
Dictate?
Adapt?
Use your Sentence Checker
Sentence time over! Click to move on.
Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?
Let's take a quick look at how the Example Text is presented and the features it has.
The Example Text has...
Paragraphs
Title
Third person
Sentences with questions
Metaphors
Text structure
Features
The Queen and The Apple
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
Sentences with questions
Paragraph
Title
Metaphors
Third person
Click on / Click off
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Let's work in:
Stations
Pairs
Groups
Describing the 'good' character
Let me show you
Drag the phrases that describe Snow White's character.
eyes narrowed with dislike
veiny, aged hands
a sly smile onto her cruel face
warm smile
eyes of innocence
illuminating her loveliness
Reveal
Describing the 'good' character
Let's find and discuss
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
Reveal
Replace?
Remove?
Feel
Imagine
Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Describing the 'good' character
Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?
Reveal
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Describing the 'villain'
Let me show you
Drag the descriptions of the evil queen into her cloak.
snickered quietly
the ugliness of envy
delighted at the thought of company
cunningly crooned
eyes of innocence
pearl teeth
Reveal
Describing the 'villain'
Let's find and discuss
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
Reveal
Replace?
Remove?
Feel
Imagine
Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Describing the villain
Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?
Reveal
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Questions
Let me show you
Let's discuss how these questions keep the reader interested.
Who could it be?
Were they bringing her good news?
Questions
Let's find and discuss
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought. “No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
Reveal
Replace?
Remove?
Feel
Imagine
Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Questions
Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?
Reveal
Writer's Knowledge
Questions
Describing the 'good' character
Describing the 'villain'
Character reactions
Describing character reactions
Let me show you
Drag the phrases that show us that the queen's reactions match her character.
eagerly opened the door
snickered quietly
accepted it with grateful wonderment
forced a sly smile
gave a warm smile
her eyes narrowed with dislike and disdain
Reveal
Describing character reactions
Let's find and discuss
Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
Reveal
Replace?
Remove?
Feel
Imagine
Your Turn: Which paragraphs will you look at?
Describing character reactions
Imagine Feel Replace? Remove?
Reveal
Question Quiz Time
Secret Selector
Team Competition
How will we answer our questions today?
Vote
ThumbsUp
ThinkPair Share
Bob Up
Tick Me
Which of these descriptions of Snow White are accurate?
A She has a warm smile.
B She has veiny, aged hands.
C She delights at the thought of company.
Check
Which One's Right?
Choose the best description of the evil queen.
B warm
A caring
C innocent
D cunning
True or False?
Questions do not help to keep the reader interested.
True
False
Picture Me
Which is the best match for the evil queen's 'smile of satisfaction' ?
Can I find and discuss Writer’s Knowledge 5-8 in the Example Text?
CEW
Handwriting
Writing Effects
Spelling
Ideas
Other...
Feedback: Who did what well?
she reached the forest,
she saw villainous, shadowy trees
When
______
eyes of innocence
warm smile
illuminating her loveliness
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought. “No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
The crooked path through the twisted trees
led to danger
__________________________________________
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her. Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit. “Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple. Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her. Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit. “Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple. Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
snickered quietly
the ugliness of envy
cunningly crooned
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her. Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit. “Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple. Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
snickered quietly
forced a sly smile
her eyes narrowed with dislike and disdain
A She has a warm smile.
B She has veiny, aged hands.
C She delights at the thought of company.
It had been such a busy morning. Gently shaking her head in frustration, Snow White had just completed the tidying. Then came the knock. Delighted at the thought of company, she eagerly opened the door. She smiled in anticipation of who should be behind it. Could it be one of her seven friends? Were they bringing her good news? Slowly, the door creaked open, the sunlight outside illuminating Snow White’s loveliness. There in contrast, stood the evil, jealous queen behind the wooden door. She met Snow White’s warm smile and her eyes narrowed with dislike, disdain and the ugliness of envy. Her veiny, aged hands were rubbing together as she forced a sly smile onto her cruel face. Snow White felt a sense of unease.
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought. “No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”
“My lovely one!” the queen cunningly crooned. “Oh, my lovely one! I have brought for you the shiniest, juiciest, most delicious apple to enjoy!” Averting her gaze from Snow White’s beauty, she pushed it at her. Snow White accepted it with grateful wonderment. “Why, thank you!” she cried. “How very kind!” So pleased was Snow White, she did not hesitate to receive this gift of poisonous deceit. “Eat it,” the queen ordered whilst her eyes were narrowing. Pausing only to inhale the inciting fragrance, Snow White sank her pearl teeth into the flesh of the crisp apple. Just then, the girl exclaimed, “Delicious!” The queen broke a smile of satisfaction. She knew it wouldn’t be long… and it wasn’t. Snow White clutched her throat in confusion, dizzily sank to the floor and closed her eyes of innocence. She coughed, spluttered and choked her last breath as the apple’s remains were rolling across the floor. The queen snickered quietly and exhaled in approval.
Oh, and what was this… a handsome prince in the doorway? Was this a chance to provide the kiss of life? No, there would be no room for a resolution here - not a chance. A gasp of horror on his face with widening eyes… an easy victim, the queen thought. “No!” the prince cried, “Tell me it isn’t so!” The heartless queen faced him, clutching a sharp, poisoned arrow under her black cape. The cruel grin now returned to her face. It was time for him to meet a sudden end, too. Lurching towards him, she drove the piercing point through his anguished heart. He withered to the floor in crippling grief, of course. She stepped over his lifeless body, allowed herself a final smile and uttered the words, “This time, there will be no happy ending.”