Desert Island Escape - Revising & Editing

Escape room

Notebook

Desert Island

Notes about the island

Use with caution

Backpack

This diary narrates the experiences of a brave castaway who, after ending up on a remote island, faces a series of clever challenges to obtain the necessary resources to build a raft and be able to escape from this desolate island. Are you ready for this thrilling survival quest?

Tiririri-ri!

Introduction

You're stuck on the island and the only way to escape is by correctly identifying the correct revising and editing answers!

Backpack

Mission

Your mission today is to get yourself off the island by finding the correct answers to the revising and editing questions.

Raft

Shrubs

Plane

Shelter

Forest

Backpack

mission

Airplane

Word Replacement & Sentence Combining

Luggage

Backpack

Layla wants to replace the phrase "think of" in sentence 2. Which word would be MOST effective to use in this sentence?

(2) He had just sat down at his desk to think of topics for his English essay when he heard his mother calling him.

A. scrutinize

B. contemplate

C. divulge

D. observe

Backpack

What is the best way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

A. Then he quickly apologized, but he didn't want his mother to have the opportunity to scold him for a disrespectful attitude.

(6) Then he quickly apologized. (7) He didn't want his mother to have the opportunity to scold him for a disrespectful attitude.

B. Then he quickly apologized; so he didn't want his mother to have the opportunity to scold him for a disrespectful attitude.

C. Then he quickly apologized; he didn't want his mother to have the opportunity to scold him for a disrespectful attitude.

Backpack

Here you go!

It will be added to your backpack. You will need it to be able to eat during the days you spend on the deserted island.

GOOD!

You have food and cooking utensils

Backpack

Mission

Your mission today is to get yourself off the island by finding the correct answers to the revising and editing questions.

Raft

Shrubs

Plane

Shelter

Forest

Backpack

mission

Forest

What change, if any, is needed?

Logs

Backpack

(16) Julian stood over his aunt's stove, staring at the side of a box and had a struggle to decipher the precise order of operations required to make macaroni and cheese.

What revision, if any, is needed in sentence 16?

Backpack

B. Julian stood over his aunt's stove, staring at the side of a box that struggled to decipher the precise order of operations to make macaroni and cheese and the requirements.

A. Julian stood over his aunt's stove, starting at the side of a box and struggling to decipher the precise order of operations required to make macaroni and cheese.

Backpack

(37) An hour later when his mother called, Julian was wiping noodles and wiping cheese sauce off of Pedro, off himself, off the wall, and off the floor.

Layla has included redundant information in sentence 37. What is the MOST effective way to revise this sentence?

Backpack

B. An hour later when his mother called, Julian was wiping noodles and cheese sauce off of Pedro, himself, the wall, and the floor.

A. An hour later when his mother called, noodles and cheese sauce were being wiped off by Julian, himself, the wall, and the floor.

Backpack

Great!

Will be added to your backpack. You will need it for the days you spend on the desert island.

GREAT!

You have a rope, maybe it will be useful for you

Backpack

Mission

Your mission today is to get yourself off the island by finding the correct answers to the revising and editing questions.

Raft

Shrubs

Plane

Shelter

Forest

Backpack

Shrub

Mission

Transitions

Food

Backpack

The word "likewise" is not an effective transition in sentence 30. Which transition word or phrase should replace "likewise?"

For this reason

However

(29) Without equal access to funding, women and people with disabilities typically find fewer opportunities in the African business world. (30) Likewise, Nyakarundi would like to create a small fund to help people who show entrepreneurial skills but cannot afford to biy into ARED's franchise business.

Backpack

Which sentence would best follow and support sentence 25?

An important skill for any franchise owner is to be able to ride a bicycle and to have the strength to tow a kiosk.

(25) Nyakarundi says he look for people who lack opportunities to become franchise owners.

These owners lease their kiosk directly from ARED with only a $100 down payment and ongoing payments of $200.

Backpack

Keep it up!

It will be added to your backpack. You will need it for the days you spend on the deserted island.

GOOD!

You have a hatchet, it might be useful to you

Backpack

Mission

Your mission today is to get yourself off the island by finding the correct answers to the revising and editing questions.

Raft

Shrub

Airplane

Shelter

Forest

Backpack

Mission

Shelter

Adding and Deleting

Tent

Backpack

(20) Wiest's team developed their theory after they carefully studied the mammoth bones and saw tooth marks made from rodents and holes created by scavenger beetles. (21) Researchers believed that the holes and tooth marks on the bones provided evidence that the bones were not immediately buried by sediment or by water; rather, they had been exposed to the elements for a long time. (22) The malnourished condition of the mammoths seems to support Wiest's drought theory. (23) Further testing also suggested that the mammoths had died when central Texas was in a cool period - about seven degrees cooler on average than today.

Where is the best place to insert this sentence? Although the temperatures were only slightly different, the changes may have greatly affected rainfall, soil, and plant and animal growth, ultimately leading to the mammoths' death.

A. After sentence 20

B. After sentence 22

C. After sentence 23

Backpack

Which sentence i the paragraph is extraneous and should be deleted from the essay?

(7) Over the years as scientists studied the mammoths, they uncovered mroe information that altered their initial theories. (8) This happens often due to new discoveries or additional data that lead to new theories. (9) One initial theory was that the mammoth herd was trapped in a ravine and drowned in a flash flood. (10) Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time.

A. Sentence 8

B. Sentence 10

C. Sentence 9

Backpack

A. Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled climbing out of the ravine in time surviving the sudden flooding.

What is the most effective ay to combine sentences 10 and 11? (10) Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time. (11) That would have made it hard to survive the sudden flooding.

B. Because they are so large, the mammoths ikely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time to survive the sudden flooding.

C. Because they are so large, the mammoths likely would have struggled to climb out of the ravine in time, and to survive the sudden flooding.

Backpack

There you go!

It will be added to your backpack. You will need it for the days you spend on the deserted island.

GOOD!

You have a flashlight, maybe it will be useful to you

Backpack

Mission

Raft

You've completed your revising and editing review! Now time to escape!

Shrubs

Airplane

Shelter

Forest

Wait, look in your backpack

Check the items in your backpack and use the flashlight to find the code to access the final mission that will allow you to escape from the deserted island.

Keep searching

Keep searching

Keep searching

Code: 1234

Keep searching

Enter the code you have obtained to access the final mission

Enter the password

Oops!

You have explored the entire island, managed to build a raft, but now you can't remember where you left your backpack and you'll need it before you can leave. On the map, you can see the places where your backpack might be.

Forest

Mountains

Airplane

Shrubs

Shelter

Deserted Island Map

Drag the parts of the map to find where you left your backpack and be able to escape from the deserted island.

CONGRATULATIONS!

Wow, you got it!

Congratulations adventurer! You have shown great bravery and wit. You have successfully overcome each challenge and have managed to build the raft that will take you back to the civilized world. May your journey back be filled with new adventures and emotions!

Once again!

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Mission

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Mission

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Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to dive into a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to dive into a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to immerse yourself in a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to immerse yourself in a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Hint

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Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and riddles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each puzzle.

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to immerse yourself in a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to dive into a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to immerse yourself in a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Clue

In this window, you will find a series of key clues that will help you solve the challenges and puzzles that await you on this deserted island. Remember to keep your eyes wide open and work as a team to decipher each riddle.

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to immerse yourself in a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!

Ouch!

Don't be discouraged, the adventure is not over yet! Take a moment to rest and try again. Remember every mistake is a learning opportunity that will bring you closer to victory. Cheer up, brave adventurer!

Don't give up!

even the greatest explorers faced unexpected challenges

Mission

A cool subtitle here

Welcome to a new mission in our exciting adventure! In this challenging task, you will face unique obstacles that will test your wit and teamwork. Get ready to dive into a world full of mysteries and emotions, where every decision will bring you closer to victory. Let the survival begin!