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Level 1 simple limited comparison

1. Which level is this paragraph?

Level 4detailed perceptive comparison

Level 2Some understanding and comparison

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2. What level is this paragraph ?

Level 4Perceptive comparison

Level 2 Some understanding and comparison

The writer of Source A is nostalgic as he recalls the sweets of his childhood cinema trips. Sweets are the most important part of the cinema experience because most of his account is about them and not what he watched. He shows this by describing all the sweets in great detail, building up to what he regards as the 'star lolly' of the Jaffa. By using the adjective 'star' he makes clear that it is the main attraction of the sweet-eating experiences, the biggest name in the show. On the other hand, the writer in Source B does not share this nostalgic attitude to past sweets as in the past they were potentially life-threatening. He describes how these sweets contained the most 'virulent poison'. His choice of the adjective 'virulent' suggests how severe, even deadly, the effects of this poison may have been.

Level3 clear relevant comparison

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The writer of source A is excited about eating sweets at the cinema. He even describes the Jaffa as the 'star lolly' to show that this was his favourite. The adjective 'star' suggests that it stood out from the others. On the other hand, the writer is Source B is worried that some sweets may be dangerous for children. He uses repetition of 'poison' and 'poisonous' to show that sweets make children poorly. This shows that he thinks sweets can be very dangerous to children's health.

3. What level is this paragraph?

Level 3 - clear relevant comparison

Level 1 - simple limited comparison

Level 2 Some understanding and comparison

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Level 4 perceptive comparison

4.What level is this paragraph?

Level 3Clear and relevant comparison

Level 2 Some understanding and comment

In source A, the writer is unashamedly enthusiastic about sweets in his nostalgic return to childhood. He has structured his detailed description of sweets to climax with the 'star lolly' to reinforce the superiority of the Jaffa. The metaphor of 'star' with its connotations of fame and celebrity links with the cinema setting, outshining whatever is on screen. James' sensual celebration of the sweets of his childhood contrasts with the more rational and scientific investigation of source B in its account of how sweet eating in the past was potentially fatal for children due to the practices of some manufacturers. The use of the superlative 'most virulent poiston' conveys the writer's horror about the poisonous nature of sweets created in a 'villainous manner' by manufacturers in the past. This melodramatic description of sweet makers as criminals who have intentionally harmed chldren gives Source B a moral crusading attitude to sweets as a product that children need protecing from.

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