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Read the following excerpt. Which of the following is the best revision?

(33) The Montgolfier brothers introduced the world to ballooning, a hobby that is beloved and people practice around the world today. (34) Yet their contribution to society didn’t end with their inventions. (35) The brothers sparked ideas and creativity in others and encouraged them to lift their imaginations skyward.

The Montgolfier brothers introduced the world to ballooning, a hobby that is beloved and practiced by people around the world today.

the brothers introduced the world ballooning. A hobby that people love

The Montgolfier brothers introduced the world to ballooning, which is still practiced today.

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Right!This response expresses the ideas in a clear and effective way. By changing “practice” to “practiced,” the writer uses an adjective that is parallel to “beloved,” and corrects the error from the original sentence.

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Read the following excerpt. Which of the following is the best revision?

(1) Every July my family packs suitcases to prepare for two weeks away from home.(2) I always dream that I’m packing for a European vacation or mountainous adventure,but in reality we are packing to spend two weeks at my grandparents’ house. (3) Lollyand Pops live on a few acres in the Hill Country. (4) It’s not Europe or the mountains, butit’s a lot more fun than staying at ho

It’s not Europe or the mountains , but it’s more fun than staying home all summer.

its not eroupe or the mountains, but its way more fun than staying at home all summer, which is not fun.

Europe and the mountains are not fun, I like staying home all summer.

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Right!This response is a complete sentence that expresses ideas clearly and effectively. By removing the redundant phrase “a lot” and the redundant clause “which is not fun,” the sentence is more effective, and the meaning is not changed.

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Read the following excerpt. Sentence 2 needs to be revised. Which revision makes sentence 2 clear and effective?

(1) Swimmers have been both inspired and challenged by the strip of water known as the English Channel. (2) In fact, this slice of ocean has been traversed by more than 2,000 swimmers between England and France. (3) About 40 have swum the channel twice without stopping, and four individuals have even swum three consecutive laps of the channel. (4) Sarah Thomas did something even more remarkable. (5) She is a world-class swimmer who hoped to set a record.

Over 2,000 swimmers have successfully crossed the English Channel between England and France.

There have been a lot of swimmers who have attempted to swim across the English Channel, but not many have succeeded.

The English Channel has been swum by a lot of swimmers, and it's quite challenging.

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Right!It begins with a quantifier "Over 2,000" which is more precise than "a lot of swimmers" and it specifies that the location of the swim is between England and France.

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Cassidy has used an ineffective transition at the beginning of sentence 17. Select the phrase that should replace For these reasons in this sentence.

(15) The 2016 Summer Olympics were a resounding success in some ways. (16) Some 3.6 billion people watched on television, and more than 1.17 million tourists attended in person. (17) For these reasons, the host city of Rio de Janeiro failed to benefit financially because it had spent so much money. (18) A 2017 USA Today article reported that the cost of the Rio Olympics was $13.1 billion. (19) The 2014 Winter Olympics in Sochi, Russia, were even more expensive. (20) Niall McCarthy of Forbes magazine reported that “in the end, the Games cost Russia over $20 billion, a mammoth cost overrun of 289 percent.”

In spite of this

Generally speaking

All things considered

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Right!

Sentence 16 describes the success of the 2016 Summer Olympics with regard to the number of TV viewers and tourists who attended the event. However, sentence 17 doesn't logically follow up on this information with the phrase "for these reasons" since it isn't referring to the success but to the financial failure of the event. The phrase "in spite of this" creates a clear link with the preceding sentence by indicating that despite the impressive number of TV viewers and tourists, the host city of Rio de Janeiro failed to benefit financially from the event. By using "in spite of this" in sentence 17, the paragraph becomes more cohesive and logically consistent.

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Sentence 8 needs to be revised. Rewrite sentence 8 in a clear and effective way.

(8) Cities that want to must undergo a screening process, and it is rigorous, to host the Winter or Summer Games. (9) It is overseen by the International Olympic Committee, or IOC. (10) Those under serious consideration have to pay hundreds of thousands of dollars, even though they may not be selected. (11) And that is just the beginning of the costs. (12) When a city is chosen as the host, it is expected to provide state-of-the-art athletic facilities. (13) It must also furnish an “Olympic village” that can house thousands of people. (14) It must also be able to provide reliable transportation and security.

Cities that want to host the Winter or Summer Games are subject to a stringent evaluation process, which is managed by the International Olympic Committee.

Cities that want to host the Winter or Summer Games must undergo a rigorous screening process.

The Winter and Summer Games are hosted by cities that go through a selection process, which is overseen by the International Olympic Committee.

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Right!

The sentence uses clear and direct language to convey the essential information about the screening process. It answers the question of what a city must go through if it wants to host the Winter or Summer Games. The word "rigorous" emphasizes the demanding nature of the process and the high standards that cities must meet.

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