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Sentence and pAragraph-level issues

Passive vs. Active voice

ACTIVE

PASSIVE

Dos Equis is voraciously consumed by the most interesting man in the world.

The most interesting man in the world voraciously consumes Dos Equis.

PASSIVE VOICE - (1) When might a writer need to use passive? (2) Can pack a punch. Examine caveat on page 103. Then, consider: What about if your colleague makes an error and you have to explain a change in policy due to this error?

Subordination

A technique for making one fact or idea seem less important than another

Purposes: flow, avoiding monotony, helping readers understand your main focus

See page 103

Practice

Without significantly losing the meaning of these sentences, revise the following sentences using subordination so that the emphasis is on the fact that Karen and Braxton were tired at the end of the day.

Karen and Braxton exercised. They have bikes. They rode them. They swam in the pool. They got tired. The day ended.

Discussion

Explain nominalizations.

Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit.

Define parallelism.

https://writingcommons.org/maintain-a-high-verb-to-noun-ratio

Conciseness

REDUNDANCIES

PADDED PHRASES

Plan ahead Examples?

Due to the fact that vs. because Examples?

Best Practices

For lists (p. 105)

DISCUSSION

Examine pages 100-101

Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit.

How do you define coherence?